I love the rain | Teen Ink
  1. Home
  2. Poetry
  3. Free Verse
  4. I love the rain

I love the rain

February 12, 2010
By NerdGirlVictoria SILVER, Mena, Arkansas
More by this author
NerdGirlVictoria SILVER, Mena, Arkansas
8 articles 7 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
I declare to you that woman must not depend upon the protection of man, but must be taught to protect herself, and there I take my stand.<br /> - Susan B. Anthony

View profile

I love the rain it's like music,
I love the rain because no one can see me cry for the tings I've done.
I love the rain because it's beutiful.
I love the rain because is's cool on my warm skin,
I love the rain because it washes away all my fears,
I love the rain because it's like the skys crying a thousand tears,
I love the rain because no one can see me for what I've done,
I love the rain and te way it cresses my skin,
I love the way it washes the hurt away, I love the sound the smell the feel,
I love the rain because I know the sun will shine again one day.

© Amanda T., Scituate, MA

The author's comments:
The rain inspired it i was in history and my teacher was going on and on and I started this.
Post a comment
Submit your own

Similar Articles

Previous Next
Poetry
Silence
By bitty09 SILVER
Claymont, Delaware
bitty09 SILVER, Claymont, Delaware
5 articles 0 photos 0 comments
View profile
Poetry
Remembrance
By Rachel Bellah BRONZE
Seattle, Washington
Rachel Bellah BRONZE, Seattle, Washington
4 articles 0 photos 1 comment
View profile
Poetry
I want a guy...
By grlgotgame BRONZE
Chillicothe, Ohio
grlgotgame BRONZE, Chillicothe, Ohio
4 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Girls with butts like mine, don&#039;t talk to boys with faces like yours.&quot;

View profile
Poetry
leap
By carreyelaine GOLD
Arlington, Tennessee
carreyelaine GOLD, Arlington, Tennessee
12 articles 4 photos 1 comment
View profile
Poetry
Sing it Out Loud
By Poe_poe SILVER
DeMotte, Indiana
Poe_poe SILVER, DeMotte, Indiana
7 articles 0 photos 0 comments
View profile
Poetry
"Story of a Mother"
By Suzie17 GOLD
West Monroe, Louisiana
Suzie17 GOLD, West Monroe, Louisiana
19 articles 0 photos 29 comments
View profile

JOIN THE DISCUSSION

This article has 15 comments.

NerdGirlVictoria SILVER said...
on Feb. 27 2010 at 4:13 pm
NerdGirlVictoria SILVER, Mena, Arkansas
8 articles 7 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
I declare to you that woman must not depend upon the protection of man, but must be taught to protect herself, and there I take my stand.<br /> - Susan B. Anthony

View profile
Thanks i love the rain to lol
*Belle* said...
on Feb. 27 2010 at 3:13 pm
this is excellent! i just love the way the poem flows together. and i love the rain too. :)
NerdGirlVictoria SILVER said...
on Feb. 24 2010 at 8:05 pm
NerdGirlVictoria SILVER, Mena, Arkansas
8 articles 7 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
I declare to you that woman must not depend upon the protection of man, but must be taught to protect herself, and there I take my stand.<br /> - Susan B. Anthony

View profile
um repetition was the point of the work ...thats why its up repeating
Nikiblue PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 24 2010 at 7:51 pm
Nikiblue PLATINUM, Bloomfield Hills, Michigan
20 articles 0 photos 137 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Stupid Is As Stupid Does.&quot; -Forest Gump (;<br /> &quot;No one who achieves success does so without the help of others. The wise and confident acknowledge this help with gratitude.&quot;

View profile
The imagery was pretty good, but I think the repetition of "I love the rain" so many times is unnecessary. Yes if you repeated it three times maybe four it'd be ok, but you repeated it a little too many times. Also, the lines are a little long. If you spread the sentences in only a few phrases each stanza, it would have flowed a little better in my opinion. Sorry to be harsh.
NerdGirlVictoria SILVER said...
on Feb. 23 2010 at 7:49 pm
NerdGirlVictoria SILVER, Mena, Arkansas
8 articles 7 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
I declare to you that woman must not depend upon the protection of man, but must be taught to protect herself, and there I take my stand.<br /> - Susan B. Anthony

View profile
Thanks to all of you!
NerdGirlVictoria SILVER said...
on Feb. 23 2010 at 7:47 pm
NerdGirlVictoria SILVER, Mena, Arkansas
8 articles 7 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
I declare to you that woman must not depend upon the protection of man, but must be taught to protect herself, and there I take my stand.<br /> - Susan B. Anthony

View profile
Thank you..yeah im using googl docs and it auto corrects things i dont want it to
KanenRenoir SILVER said...
on Feb. 23 2010 at 7:46 pm
KanenRenoir SILVER, Caldwell, Texas
7 articles 0 photos 17 comments
View profile
Wow, this was really good,. There were a few typo, but I really enjoyed it, especially the last line.
chocolateharp SILVER said...
on Feb. 23 2010 at 7:43 pm
chocolateharp SILVER, Plaistow, New Hampshire
8 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Dear God,&quot; she prayed, &quot;let me be something every minute of every hour of my life. Let me be gay; let me be sad. Let me be cold; let me be warm. Let me be hungry...have too much to eat. Let me be ragged or well dressed. Let me be sincere - be deceitful. Let me be truthful; let me be a liar. Let me be honorable and let me sin. Only let me be something every blessed minute. And when I sleep, let me dream all the time so that not one little piece of living is ever lost.&quot; - Betty Smith (A Tree Grows in Brooklyn)

View profile
This is beautiful, and it feels very heartfelt. Great work; keep writing!!
NerdGirlVictoria SILVER said...
on Feb. 21 2010 at 2:50 pm
NerdGirlVictoria SILVER, Mena, Arkansas
8 articles 7 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
I declare to you that woman must not depend upon the protection of man, but must be taught to protect herself, and there I take my stand.<br /> - Susan B. Anthony

View profile
I am thanking you out loud even if u can't hear me lol
NerdGirlVictoria SILVER said...
on Feb. 21 2010 at 2:49 pm
NerdGirlVictoria SILVER, Mena, Arkansas
8 articles 7 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
I declare to you that woman must not depend upon the protection of man, but must be taught to protect herself, and there I take my stand.<br /> - Susan B. Anthony

View profile
Thank you very much
SarClark BRONZE said...
on Feb. 21 2010 at 2:36 pm
SarClark BRONZE, NC, Connecticut
2 articles 0 photos 534 comments
View profile
Yeah, I agree (Amber) This was really good!
love2love17 GOLD said...
on Feb. 21 2010 at 2:36 pm
love2love17 GOLD, Springfield, Missouri
13 articles 0 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
You only live once, but if you do it right, once is enough. -Mae West

View profile
This is very beautiful- I love the comparisons!
NerdGirlVictoria SILVER said...
on Feb. 21 2010 at 1:20 pm
NerdGirlVictoria SILVER, Mena, Arkansas
8 articles 7 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
I declare to you that woman must not depend upon the protection of man, but must be taught to protect herself, and there I take my stand.<br /> - Susan B. Anthony

View profile
Thank you very much
AmberAnn_d-_-b SILVER said...
on Feb. 20 2010 at 5:15 pm
AmberAnn_d-_-b SILVER, Laconia, New Hampshire
9 articles 12 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Don&#039;t sweat the small stuff, and its all small stuff.&quot;~CFC

View profile
I like the format, good job :)