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March 22, 2010
By Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
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Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

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Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow<br /> By Me:)

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Hidden in the darkness
Heart as cold as ice
Waiting for a hero
Everything has its price

Rejected by society
Victim of their hate
Far beyond their mercy
Kindness comes too late

© Asia B., Hudson, MA

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mee-mee SILVER said...
on Sep. 8 2011 at 12:35 pm
mee-mee SILVER, Orlando, Florida
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&quot;we all have dreams. but always remember with that dream comes a star. trust in yourself, believe in who you are. with nothing but confidence you will go far.&quot;<br /> -mee-mee hoskins<br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> quote written by:mee mee hoskins

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woah ! i really love this poem . its short and straight to the point .

keep writing this is your gift .

Supernova7 GOLD said...
on Oct. 21 2010 at 10:07 pm
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

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Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow<br /> By Me:)

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THANK YOU!!:)
kmarie14 PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 18 2010 at 9:40 pm
kmarie14 PLATINUM, Hyrum, Utah
22 articles 5 photos 245 comments

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&quot;Life is either an adventure...or nothing&quot; -Helen Keller

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its crazy how beautiful your writing is....you turn words into raw emotions...amazing:) love it!
SamiLynn PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 19 2010 at 11:40 pm
SamiLynn PLATINUM, Anthem, Arizona
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&quot;The unexamined life is not worth living.&quot; ~Socrates

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brief and powerful. i like it!
Supernova7 GOLD said...
on Sep. 17 2010 at 9:59 pm
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

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Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow<br /> By Me:)

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Thank you Kal:)
-Kal- GOLD said...
on Sep. 17 2010 at 9:46 pm
-Kal- GOLD, Carthage, North Carolina
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&quot;Faith sees the invisible, believes the incredible, and recieves the impossible&quot; <br /> -Anonymous

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This is very well written and has an excellent rythm. You cut it off at the perfect time too cause much longer and it would've ruined the effect. Great job!
Supernova7 GOLD said...
on Sep. 6 2010 at 2:50 pm
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

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Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow<br /> By Me:)

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Its one of my rough drafts I can't even remember why I wrote it but thank you
Amiee said...
on Sep. 5 2010 at 4:19 am
wow, cool!
BrokenPuppet said...
on Sep. 4 2010 at 10:48 am
BrokenPuppet, Romeo, Michigan
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This is short but it gets it's point across. It is well written.

The only thing I would suggest is that you pack more emotion into your words. This poem should be giving off pain...but it was only some words that tried to take the shape of pain.

But...I think this is a good poem. A REALLY good poem. It just needs more emotion. :) Good job

Supernova7 GOLD said...
on Sep. 4 2010 at 10:40 am
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

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Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow<br /> By Me:)

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Lol its ok one of my best friends lives in Korea thanks for the comments:)
Amiee said...
on Sep. 4 2010 at 1:51 am
oh shoot, i forgot this was an english site and wrote korean, really sorry!
Amiee said...
on Sep. 4 2010 at 1:49 am

I LOVE THIS! this is just the style of writing i love! it doesn't excatly have the subject in the poem but instead makes the person think about it, and it's sooo descriptive!

5 of 5! 오점만점에오점!

Supernova7 GOLD said...
on Aug. 31 2010 at 10:35 pm
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

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Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow<br /> By Me:)

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:)                           
Supernova7 GOLD said...
on Aug. 31 2010 at 10:34 pm
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

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Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow<br /> By Me:)

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Thank you Zavery and no problem you're a good writer:)
Boosflash DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 28 2010 at 9:17 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Papillion, Nebraska
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What the front door.

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you're welcome captain. your black holes are much appreciated as well.
_NoAir_ BRONZE said...
on Aug. 27 2010 at 10:01 pm
_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
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There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.<br /> <br /> <br /> &ndash;Golly (Harriet The Spy)

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Amazing. I love your style of expression. Very affective! Thanks for commenting on my work.   =)
Supernova7 GOLD said...
on Aug. 25 2010 at 9:24 pm
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

Favorite Quote:
Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow<br /> By Me:)

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THANK YOU!!!!!! youre comments are appreciated:)
Boosflash DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 23 2010 at 10:36 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Papillion, Nebraska
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What the front door.

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i lovwe these 8 lines of awesomenss. and i love the tragic/you came too late /I'm gonna die feeling. do your dance captain.
Supernova7 GOLD said...
on Aug. 13 2010 at 8:34 am
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

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Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow<br /> By Me:)

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Thanx Riley:)
riley... GOLD said...
on Aug. 10 2010 at 1:37 pm
riley... GOLD, Yakima, Washington
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&quot;i became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity.&quot; edgar allen poe.

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wow, so deep. the main question running through my head after i read it was, "how old is this author??" because it is so deep and real and true. it seems like so much experience is poured out in two stanzas.