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When The Kingdom Falls (There Goes A Way Out From Here)

April 19, 2010
By Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
55 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.


When the kingdom falls,
You will be left here to rot
In your misery and shame,
But you don’t have to go alone.
You can bring a friend
if you like,
So for once you can feel wanted,
And greeted-except by the nothingness
That will consume you
on your way down.
You will be able
to taste the sweet
Descent into madness.
If you’ve already tasted it,
Then your stomach
will bulge from too many
Mouthfuls of insanity.

This is the only place
that rotten people like you
Have left to go….

The feelings of your king
are bottled up.
He could not warn you
Of what this place holds.
Take your king and shatter him
into a million pieces.
Then piece them back together,
seal the cracks with superglue,
But only a little so that
justice can seep through.
Then set the bottle on fire.
Take it to the edge of a cliff,
and leave it their to burn.
Now this will be a very wild fire,
And it will spread rapidly,….
So Jump.



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on Jul. 19 2010 at 10:17 am
DreamWriter17 PLATINUM, Marengo, Indiana
34 articles 1 photo 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
learn from your past to live for the future.

.......like right now...

on Jul. 18 2010 at 6:28 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
55 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

It really helps when someone other than myself says that, because when I say it, its just, you know, me saying it, and it doesnt really work well. merci captain.  after i read your commentism i reread my poem to see if i saw what you saw. do your dance captain.

on Jul. 18 2010 at 6:25 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
55 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

HAHAHA! here I am. no there i am, no there you are captain.

CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Jul. 17 2010 at 11:02 am
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
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every word in this has my attention, you capture emotion and detail, and all I can say is it's perfect and i wouldn't change not even one word in it.

on Jun. 20 2010 at 12:09 pm
DreamWriter17 PLATINUM, Marengo, Indiana
34 articles 1 photo 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
learn from your past to live for the future.

Oh, I hear you , some people just don't GET IT

on Jun. 20 2010 at 2:50 am
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
55 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

've been working on my straightforwardness. thank you captain. you know, some people just dont.....

on Jun. 11 2010 at 7:15 pm
DreamWriter17 PLATINUM, Marengo, Indiana
34 articles 1 photo 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
learn from your past to live for the future.

I love this piece, as usual, it's so straight-forward and beautiful...

on May. 24 2010 at 11:13 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
55 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

not trying to stalk you captain, but I was wondering if you would read stormhawks and comment on it for me since nobody else has...i want to know what you think...

on May. 14 2010 at 11:55 am
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
55 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!!!-i shouldnt have done that-it made it seem like i was yelling at you. i added that line to make the poem a little more clear, so people could see the poem was about a king who did wrong and so his people paid for it. so i guess there wasnt really a way out for them like the title says-since they jumped off a cliff....

on May. 14 2010 at 11:44 am
Starrlyt PLATINUM, Willard, North Carolina
20 articles 0 photos 90 comments

Favorite Quote:
Shoot for the moon, even if you miss, you'll land among the stars -Les Brown

"Then piece them back together,
seal the cracks with superglue,
But only a little so that
justice can seep through" I really really really liked this line. It has great flow, and you're a great poet.

on May. 12 2010 at 1:13 am
AlexandraVasari PLATINUM, Fort Stewart, Georgia
28 articles 4 photos 174 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing songs is super intimate. It's a bit like getting naked"~ Gwen Stefani

hahaha I get it now:)

on May. 11 2010 at 11:21 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
55 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

yeah they're basically going crazy-hope you got that. hmm.....

on May. 11 2010 at 10:51 pm
AlexandraVasari PLATINUM, Fort Stewart, Georgia
28 articles 4 photos 174 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing songs is super intimate. It's a bit like getting naked"~ Gwen Stefani

You will be able
to taste the sweet
Descent into madness.
If you’ve already tasted it,
Then your stomach
will bulge from too many
Mouthfuls of insanity.

This part was a little bit confusing....but my neighbors were blasting their music yesterday so I was having a hard time concentrating!Sorry about that. It makes more sense reading it now, in silence!rofl


on May. 11 2010 at 6:02 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
55 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

hmmm......right. I guess profreading your own stuff is like not proofreading it at all. thank you captain.

Irony BRONZE said...
on May. 11 2010 at 5:57 pm
Irony BRONZE, Lawndale, California
3 articles 3 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
Your handwriting. The way you walk. Which china pattern you choose. It's all giving you away. Everything you do shows your hand. Everything is a self portrait. Everything is a diary. (Chuck Palahniuk)

"Leave it their to burn" should have "there", but other than that--this just gets me. Insaneprincess already said it. Favorite aspect is probably how it builds up to the end.

on May. 10 2010 at 9:01 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
55 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

thank you-which part was confusing?

on May. 10 2010 at 8:36 pm
AlexandraVasari PLATINUM, Fort Stewart, Georgia
28 articles 4 photos 174 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing songs is super intimate. It's a bit like getting naked"~ Gwen Stefani

I love it!It's very expressive and a bit confusing at times, but I really do love it!:)

on May. 10 2010 at 5:18 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
55 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

"theres something distinctive about this one-it states a point but in a certain way" that must be the sound of my skills improving. I think I'm fianlay getting there. I've been waiting for this moment:)

on May. 10 2010 at 5:15 pm
inspire.identity. PLATINUM, Ajax, Other
23 articles 8 photos 98 comments

its just

 i don't even know how to describe it- theres something distinctive about this one. It states a point but in a certain way . 


on May. 10 2010 at 5:04 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
55 articles 0 photos 2066 comments

Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

youre the best-can you please tell me what you think its about-I wanna know what people think.