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i would rather be...

May 4, 2010
By maybesomeday2 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
maybesomeday2 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
19 articles 2 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"if we begin to discover a feeling within ourselves that nothin in this world can satisfy we should begin to wonder if perhaps we were created for another world" -C.S Lewis


i would rather be anywhere but here...
under the shimmering stars, on the hood of your truck.
with tears spilling out of my eyes, making puddles on the rusted red paint.
fingers laced in a promise made so long ago...one that means nothing in a moment like now.
the full moon, a whole in the sky's dark blanket is our only witness.
to share the burdens i am to ashamed to speak aloud.

i would rather be anywhere but here...
when your flowerpetal hands tilt my chin towards your face, daring me to lie.
and when the truth comes i am buried in your chest as you catch each tear that shakes my entire being.
you tell me it will be ok.

i would rather be anywhere but here...
telling you that it's too late.
and watching your reaction as you realize the girl you thought you loved is no more than a monster.
but worse..when your eyes fill back up with the undying love you have for me...
and like so many times before, you try to rescue me

i would rather be anywhere but here...
as i realize that this time it's not enough.
that something between us has changed forever.
what we once shared, i destroyed out of fear.
and we will never get it back.

i would rather be anywhere but here...
as i realize that i can't stay.
and the bitter sweet kisses that burn my lips rain over me as you realize what i'm saying

and then i leave you behind
on the hood of your truck
watching the moon and waiting
for my tears to dry...


The author's comments:
one of the hardest things in life, is admitting to someone you love how terribly you mess up.
first time i've ever let anyone read my writing...eeep. any comments would be greatly appreciated

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on Aug. 22 2010 at 2:41 pm
maybesomeday2 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
19 articles 2 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"if we begin to discover a feeling within ourselves that nothin in this world can satisfy we should begin to wonder if perhaps we were created for another world" -C.S Lewis

in my head she was telling him that she had an a.bortion. wat did u think? im interested to see wat ppl thought of when they read this...

on Aug. 22 2010 at 2:37 pm
DaddyzUnwantedDolly PLATINUM, Raliegh, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened."~ Dr. Seuss

I really liked this, can you tell me what she lied about though?

on Aug. 22 2010 at 8:00 am
maybesomeday2 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
19 articles 2 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"if we begin to discover a feeling within ourselves that nothin in this world can satisfy we should begin to wonder if perhaps we were created for another world" -C.S Lewis

thanks guys..i was just curious cause when i wrote this i was thinking of a specific thing the girl had done, but i wanted to leave it open so that the reader cld rel8 to it. its easier to rel8 to a vague poem so i was jjust checking :)

on Aug. 21 2010 at 11:46 pm
Seelix PLATINUM, Chandler, Arizona
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 Beautiful! I am not sure what happened, but how I interpret this is that the girl did something that she had promised she wouldn't do or would stop doing and had to tell the other person. You really do (to idea-quote Hay_Wire) paint a picture with your writing.=D

on Aug. 21 2010 at 11:16 pm
maybesomeday2 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
19 articles 2 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"if we begin to discover a feeling within ourselves that nothin in this world can satisfy we should begin to wonder if perhaps we were created for another world" -C.S Lewis

thank u both soo much :) this is pretty personal to me..just outta curiosity..wat do u guys think i am tlking about in this poem? im interested to see how it was interpreted

on Aug. 21 2010 at 11:05 pm
BaileyBaby13 BRONZE, Enumclaw, Washington
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I agree, exactly! awesome job, don't ever stop writing.

on Jun. 17 2010 at 5:34 pm
Hay_Wire PLATINUM, Independence, Missouri
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wow. soo.. you have a great talent with the words. you can like..paint pictures with them.. :) if thats nto too cheesy.

and..i feel for ya.