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Subtle Sweethearts

May 10, 2010
By Marlyre PLATINUM, Kalamazoo, Michigan
Marlyre PLATINUM, Kalamazoo, Michigan
21 articles 0 photos 208 comments

Favorite Quote:
"when you cry, do you waste your tears?" Madonna


wisps of cotton candy
sugar already sweet lips.
summer slicked swimsuits
to innocence and
slightly salted skin from
oceanic frolicking.
granulated memories of
warm hearts and
sweeping soles
shift as new lovers
wander along in
soaring sunsets
clasp handfuls of time
and reminiscent particles
of the day.


The author's comments:
who says depressed poets cant write happy once in a while?

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on Aug. 25 2010 at 12:48 am
chrisbriones GOLD, Anaheim, California
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Favorite Quote:
"I believe nothing can be justly and completely explained by words."

As if your poetic hand was guiding me all the while.

on Aug. 22 2010 at 7:40 pm
kiwi12 PLATINUM, Austin, Texas
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I can taste this poem. I love it. I feel like I'm there, part of it...  really good job!

on Aug. 19 2010 at 8:38 am
DiamondsIntheGrass GOLD, Martinsville, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Worry is simply a misuse of the imagination.

you dont sound depressed :) it sounds very sweet.

on Aug. 15 2010 at 9:22 pm
Marlyre PLATINUM, Kalamazoo, Michigan
21 articles 0 photos 208 comments

Favorite Quote:
"when you cry, do you waste your tears?" Madonna

thanks! will try that!

ayaman said...
on Aug. 14 2010 at 11:34 pm
It's good, but I feel like its a bit forced. Maybe if you tried it in a different tense itd flow better, or if you played with the word choice a bit more that could work too.