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The forever war

May 12, 2010
By IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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I never thought
I'd see my friend
Swallowed
By this war.
His bones slowly
Crushed
Under a thousand-ton weight,
The weight of the world.
His being picked apart
By the demons
Surrounding him.
Friends become sworn enemies,
Enemies become friends.
And so it is,
Since the beginning
Of civilization
With no end
In
Sight.

© Elisa W., Cottonwood, ID

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IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 23 2012 at 9:42 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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(Sorry it took me so long to get back to this) 

You are too kind, my dearrest Leafy :)

IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 23 2012 at 9:42 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Thank you so very much for your kind comments, Jordan :)
Writer_Jordan GOLD said...
on Mar. 20 2012 at 6:05 pm
Writer_Jordan GOLD, Ellicott City, Maryland
15 articles 0 photos 182 comments

Favorite Quote:
All that is gold does not glitter,<br /> Not all those who wander are lost;<br /> The old that is strong does not wither,<br /> Deep roots are not reached by the frost.<br /> From the ashes a fire shall be woken,<br /> A light from the shadows shall spring;<br /> Renewed shall be blade that was broken,<br /> The crownless again shall be king.

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What a brilliant description. It can also be a metaphor to modern society! I loved it!
leafy said...
on Dec. 21 2011 at 3:43 pm
leafy, City, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: I hate it.&nbsp;<br /> Gil: You haven&#039;t even read it yet.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: If it&#039;s bad, I&#039;ll hate it. If it&#039;s good, then I&#039;ll be envious and hate it even more. You don&#039;t want the opinion of another writer.&nbsp;

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Don't thank me for liking this, I thank you for writing it. You certainly have a way with words.
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 2 2011 at 10:09 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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That's so sweet of you, Leafy :) I really appreciate that.

(Sorry it took me so long to get to this.)

leafy said...
on Oct. 23 2011 at 7:00 pm
leafy, City, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: I hate it.&nbsp;<br /> Gil: You haven&#039;t even read it yet.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: If it&#039;s bad, I&#039;ll hate it. If it&#039;s good, then I&#039;ll be envious and hate it even more. You don&#039;t want the opinion of another writer.&nbsp;

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No, thank you for writing this ^_^
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 20 2011 at 4:31 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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It also kinda came to be about this really good friend of mine, who was about to begin attending school. I knew he would never be the same, and he wouldn't have time for me anymore.
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 20 2011 at 4:28 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Awww, thanks ^.^ I don't think anyone's ever favorited my work, well, besides Raven. No one else has told me they did, at the very least. 

If you want to know the story behind this, you can find it somewhere near the bottom of the comments :)

leafy said...
on Oct. 19 2011 at 9:24 am
leafy, City, Other
0 articles 0 photos 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: I hate it.&nbsp;<br /> Gil: You haven&#039;t even read it yet.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: If it&#039;s bad, I&#039;ll hate it. If it&#039;s good, then I&#039;ll be envious and hate it even more. You don&#039;t want the opinion of another writer.&nbsp;

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Whoa, I totally love this! Like, it transcends through time, with real wars, or even "wars" in school. Very nice, I'm totally favoriting this ^_^
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 14 2011 at 4:08 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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(I can't spell.)
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 14 2011 at 4:07 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Haha, that totally makes sense :)

(I'm so glad you commented on this one in particular!)

mistaken_laughter PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 14 2011 at 4:01 pm
mistaken_laughter PLATINUM, Alvin, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;There are three rules to writing a novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are.&quot; W. Somerset Maugham

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Cool story behind it. I like the way it has the feeling that it doesn't really end. (Sorry if that doesn't make sense...)
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 16 2011 at 8:34 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Cool :)         
Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Jun. 16 2011 at 7:35 am
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love. <br /> Henry Drummond

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I think what you said about your life...applies to me too. :)

I'm melodramatic as well.

Yeah, I'm thinking of being a scychologist when I grow up. :)

IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 13 2011 at 3:48 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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I am definitely obsessed with dreams :) I don't think my life's really tragic, deifinitely abnormal and a bit isolated, but not really tragic. I think I'm a bit melodramatic at times :)

You like schycology? Coolness :)

IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 13 2011 at 3:46 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Wow, thanks :)
Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Jun. 9 2011 at 2:37 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love. <br /> Henry Drummond

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By the way, great poem. :)

My ELA teacher once told me that I have a gift with putting two or more ideas or messages into one poem. I think you have it too. :)

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Jun. 9 2011 at 2:36 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love. <br /> Henry Drummond

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Poem reflects your life. makes me feel like your life is sad, almost tragic.  You also seem to be obsessed with dreams. I am too. :)

I like anaylizing writing and thinking about what it shows in the writer's life. It's part of my obsession with psychology.

IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 21 2010 at 5:48 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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I will always love this poem :)

It was my first truly great piece.

IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 20 2010 at 2:48 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Thank you; it was my first really great poem since I started writing poetry. I used to always try to rhyme, and the end results were really stiff sounding.

It took this poem to help me realize that rhyme doesn't always make a poem, it's the flow and imagery,