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May 13, 2010
By KelleySchorn SILVER, Fort Worth, Texas
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KelleySchorn SILVER, Fort Worth, Texas
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Whatever you are be a good one-some president i dont remember which<br /> procrastinaters unite!...tomorrow!!-matt<br /> i&#039;m F-U-L-LLLLL i think i can spellllll-allie =]

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i'm sitting here
on this train and i
start seein' all the passengers wavin' goodbye
i turn away and start thinkin' about
the you i'm leavin
and i feel free

i used to think
that we were meant to be
but summer changed you
so drastically
you used to keep me safe and
hold me close
tell me you loved me
that you'd never leave
but all these things you did
they made me see
you never cared
a single thing for me

© Krista S., Newport Coast, CA

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just a story-poem i made up while i was bored in religion class
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lani123 said...
on May. 29 2013 at 9:39 am
i love this website
KelleySchorn SILVER said...
on Nov. 10 2010 at 9:56 pm
KelleySchorn SILVER, Fort Worth, Texas
8 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whatever you are be a good one-some president i dont remember which<br /> procrastinaters unite!...tomorrow!!-matt<br /> i&#039;m F-U-L-LLLLL i think i can spellllll-allie =]

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hahaha thats funny cus in my mind it actually is a song XD
Aerolin PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 16 2010 at 9:21 pm
Aerolin PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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omg it would be cool as a song :)
maybeshannon DIAMOND said...
on Sep. 27 2010 at 8:58 pm
maybeshannon DIAMOND, Keller, Texas
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yeahh it sent me an emaill that said this got publishhed!! =]] ahhh tis wonderfull!!! =]]
KelleySchorn SILVER said...
on Sep. 27 2010 at 7:16 pm
KelleySchorn SILVER, Fort Worth, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Whatever you are be a good one-some president i dont remember which<br /> procrastinaters unite!...tomorrow!!-matt<br /> i&#039;m F-U-L-LLLLL i think i can spellllll-allie =]

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oh my gosh i am being published! btw its kinda sadly ironic cuz it has a crappy name ;P
KelleySchorn SILVER said...
on Sep. 27 2010 at 7:10 pm
KelleySchorn SILVER, Fort Worth, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Whatever you are be a good one-some president i dont remember which<br /> procrastinaters unite!...tomorrow!!-matt<br /> i&#039;m F-U-L-LLLLL i think i can spellllll-allie =]

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omg i got published??? no way!!
maybeshannon DIAMOND said...
on Sep. 27 2010 at 4:14 pm
maybeshannon DIAMOND, Keller, Texas
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sorry bout th typo on your name, kell doll lol meant to put "alwayskelley" =]P  awesome job m'dear =]
maybeshannon DIAMOND said...
on Sep. 27 2010 at 4:13 pm
maybeshannon DIAMOND, Keller, Texas
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AHHH KELLYYY!!!!  YOU GOT PUBLISHHED!!!! =]]] take that all you alwayskelly haters =]
KelleySchorn SILVER said...
on Aug. 18 2010 at 10:14 pm
KelleySchorn SILVER, Fort Worth, Texas
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Whatever you are be a good one-some president i dont remember which<br /> procrastinaters unite!...tomorrow!!-matt<br /> i&#039;m F-U-L-LLLLL i think i can spellllll-allie =]

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awwe thanks linz!
possiblylindsey GOLD said...
on Aug. 18 2010 at 4:03 pm
possiblylindsey GOLD, Keller, Texas
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ayy. dont hate on her title. sure, it could use some work, but give it love: the poems greatt.[= awesome job kell!
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 25 2010 at 2:52 pm
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The flow isn't really present in this one. I mean, in certain parts your rhyming was there, but in others it was just forced. I like the idea, just work on the arrangement of your words.

And, I'm not really big on critiquing someone's title, because I am awful at coming up with them, but "made-up-story-poem"???? No reflection on your writing whatsoever, but really??? haha, just my opinion.

KelleySchorn SILVER said...
on Jul. 24 2010 at 11:24 am
KelleySchorn SILVER, Fort Worth, Texas
8 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whatever you are be a good one-some president i dont remember which<br /> procrastinaters unite!...tomorrow!!-matt<br /> i&#039;m F-U-L-LLLLL i think i can spellllll-allie =]

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thanks i wrote during school in my mind its actually a song

 

crubs33 DIAMOND said...
on Jul. 23 2010 at 5:07 pm
crubs33 DIAMOND, Lido Beach, New York
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I like it!! i love how it flows and is just really natural!!
writer62 SILVER said...
on Jul. 20 2010 at 1:58 pm
writer62 SILVER, Springfield, Virginia
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i liked it. Good job