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Standing on the Moon without a Spacesuit

June 3, 2010
By -Emie- SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
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-Emie- SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
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"Well-behaved women seldom make history." - Laurel Thatcher Ulrich
"Fairy tales do not tell children that dragons exist. Children already know that dragons exist. Fairy tales tell children that dragons can be killed." - G.K. Chesterton

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I need a break.
Just a small one.
Not literally.
I don't want a broken foot
or something like that.
I'm not a masochist.
I just need some room to
breathe.
Like deep breathing.
The kind where you:
Inhale.
Hold it.
Exhale.
Relax.
Well,
that's what's supposed
to happen,
but most of the time
I just hold my breath
t o o l o n g
and end up gasping.
Not exactly what I would call
“relaxing”.
So, maybe,
I don't want to breathe deeply,
but I do need some room.
Just a little.
Just enough so that
I don't need to
think.
[Especially about
you.]

© Grace L., Bacolod City, Philippines

The author's comments:
I suppose the meaning of the title, 'Standing on the Moon without a Spacesuit', has to do with what would happen if you were on the moon without a spacesuit. You would literally suffocate and freeze to death. You wouldn't breath and the speaker can't breath (figuratively). I made up the title months before actually writing the poem. I keep a list of titles and was going through it when I came upon this one. I thought it sounded cool, so I wrote a poem to fit it.
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-Emie- SILVER said...
on Aug. 24 2010 at 2:09 pm
-Emie- SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
8 articles 0 photos 171 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Well-behaved women seldom make history." - Laurel Thatcher Ulrich
"Fairy tales do not tell children that dragons exist. Children already know that dragons exist. Fairy tales tell children that dragons can be killed." - G.K. Chesterton

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Hmm... I see what you mean, but I think maybe when I wrote it I didn't want it to flow quite right because it's all about not being able to breath. You know?
-Emie- SILVER said...
on Aug. 24 2010 at 2:06 pm
-Emie- SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
8 articles 0 photos 171 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Well-behaved women seldom make history." - Laurel Thatcher Ulrich
"Fairy tales do not tell children that dragons exist. Children already know that dragons exist. Fairy tales tell children that dragons can be killed." - G.K. Chesterton

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I'm glad you love the title! (That's my favorite part of my poem, but it's a secret. Shhh....)
-Emie- SILVER said...
on Aug. 24 2010 at 2:05 pm
-Emie- SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Well-behaved women seldom make history." - Laurel Thatcher Ulrich
"Fairy tales do not tell children that dragons exist. Children already know that dragons exist. Fairy tales tell children that dragons can be killed." - G.K. Chesterton

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Thank you             
collegegirladventures GOLD said...
on Aug. 20 2010 at 7:54 pm
collegegirladventures GOLD, Mequon, Wisconsin
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Like it very much.
HeatherBee BRONZE said...
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HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
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kool-ness. i loved the title and really loved the poem. it was worded awesomely nd the way it was written just made it seem cooler ^^
MiriamH said...
on Aug. 16 2010 at 12:10 pm
MiriamH, Mequon, Wisconsin
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This is very good, though I would try to split the lines a little differently so it flows better... Just a suggestion.
Katie_Grey DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 9 2010 at 10:55 pm
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Hey, this is really amazing :)

The form is really good.

And your comment gives me hope for all the detached titles I've got floating around.

CrystalDE PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 4 2010 at 4:00 pm
CrystalDE PLATINUM, Concord, North Carolina
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Cool poem, ive felt like this a bit. I love your comment on it!