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I Watched

June 24, 2010
By jaredwriter19 GOLD, Masontown, Pennsylvania
jaredwriter19 GOLD, Masontown, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"If you live to be a hundred, I hope to live to be a hundred minus one day so I never have to live without you."
-Winnie the Pooh


I watch you fall gracefully

From the bridge called a crossroad

Instead of choosing a path

You jumped

As I watch a fallen angel fall once again

You look up mid-flight

Into my eyes

A smile, a sad gaze, but no goodbye

I watch you hit the ground

The abyss, rock bottom

Just when I thought you couldn’t fall even deeper

You did

I watched my heart fall with you

A black heart, cold and bleak

It fell with an angel

My angel

And I just stood by and watched.


The author's comments:
A poem I wrote based on a dream. I was originally going to make it into a short story but I wrote it as a poem on my phone when I was bored at a baseball game. Please let me know what you think - I don't write a lot a poetry and I could use suggestions!

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on Aug. 1 2010 at 12:24 pm
DancerBabe SILVER, Tuscarawas, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams." -Eleanor Roosevelt
"Bad writers plagerize, good writers steal!"

That was amazing! really good! And i write my ideas on my phone all the time too. :)

katie-cat GOLD said...
on Jul. 24 2010 at 9:13 am
katie-cat GOLD, McClellandtown, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"Look after my heart, I've left it with you."- Edward Cullen
"To love another person is to see the face of God . . ."- Les Miserables
"Don't say the old lady screamed. Bring her out and let her scream." - Mark Twain

I thought this was very sad and packed full of emotion.  I liked it.  It's short and simple, but you seem to get everything in that it needs :)