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you said you were sorry

September 27, 2010
fearlesslybeyourselff SILVER, Solon, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
There is only one you for all of time. Fearlessly be yourself.


so here is the story
you've heard it by now
you said you were sorry
for coming around
You said you were sorry
for making me cry
you said you were sorry
for passing me by
you said you were sorry
for treating me like this
you said you were sorry
for not giving me a kiss
you said you were sorry
for the pain you have caused
you said you were sorry
for putting me on pause
you said you were sorry
for previous times
you said you were sorry
for making me rhyme
you said you were sorry
for beating me down
you said you were sorry
for being a clown
you said you were sorry
you say it once more
you said you were sorry
you've said it before


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on Aug. 9 2011 at 2:47 pm
EnigmaticBeing PLATINUM, Santa Barbara, California
22 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be careful what you set your heart upon - for it will surely be yours.'
James A. Baldwin

As much as I enjoyed this poem because of how relatable it was and how much depth it has the amount of redundance that is present makes the piece seem more infantile. I'd also like to point out that even though there is a rhyme scheme present the fact that the poem has no separation makes it look a little messy. Of course that's probably just the perfectionist in me talking but still. Overall I like this poem but I think there is room for improvement. Please keep writing :]

on Jan. 1 2011 at 7:17 pm
PoetLaureate07 PLATINUM, Aberdeen, Mississippi
32 articles 0 photos 246 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to risk not being loved in return. To hope is to risk pain. To try is to risk failure, but the greatest hazard in life is to risk nothing..

this was great. quite repetetive...... but wonderful... perfect image

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on Dec. 6 2010 at 10:18 am
dorathy GOLD, Aroura, Colorado
10 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"only god can judge me"

omqq!!i love this poem i understand alot like you never here sorry enough..=|]

on Nov. 16 2010 at 6:49 pm
loveee7 DIAMOND, San Pedro, California
52 articles 6 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If Your One In A Million Than There's A Million Other People Just Like You."

Oh my gosh! I love this! Its people like you who understand my emotions!

on Oct. 27 2010 at 1:34 pm
fatesknocking GOLD, Solon, Ohio
15 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
Prayers go up and blessings come down.

i love this so much! i like the repitition and the way it flows. </3

on Oct. 25 2010 at 1:35 pm
SaMiLoVe97 SILVER, Okawville, Illinois
9 articles 3 photos 105 comments

Favorite Quote:
If it doesnt break your heart it isnt love, if it doesnt break your heart its not enough. Its when youre breaking down with your insides coming out.Thats when you learn what youre made of.-Switchfoot<3

wow. I love this. ALOT. lol really good work. keep writin'(:

on Oct. 24 2010 at 6:24 pm
kmarie14 PLATINUM, Hyrum, Utah
22 articles 5 photos 245 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is either an adventure...or nothing" -Helen Keller

:) anytime!

on Oct. 23 2010 at 2:56 pm
fearlesslybeyourselff SILVER, Solon, Ohio
5 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
There is only one you for all of time. Fearlessly be yourself.

haha its so great to get this type of feedback thans!

on Oct. 23 2010 at 1:52 pm
Ducttape.isnt.tear.proof GOLD, Eureka, California
12 articles 4 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'm selfish, impatient and a little insecure. I make mistakes, I am out of control and at times hard to handle. But if you can't handle me at my worst, then you sure as hell don't deserve me at my best."
— Marilyn Monroe
"A wise girl kisses but doesn't love, listens but doesn't believe, and leaves before she is left."
— Marilyn Monroe
"I am good, but not an angel. I do sin, but I am not the devil. I am just a small girl in a big world trying to find someone to love."
— Marilyn Monroe
"Who said nights were for sleep?"
— Marilyn Monroe
"Sex is part of nature. I go along with nature."
— Marilyn Monroe

I couldnt of said it better its like you fallow my life lol

on Oct. 22 2010 at 9:38 pm
kmarie14 PLATINUM, Hyrum, Utah
22 articles 5 photos 245 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is either an adventure...or nothing" -Helen Keller

I.love.this. One of my favorite poems and I think its because of the fact its so relatable i really really really really like it:) i think you get it by now but...i like this peom! :) thank you for posting! check out my work if u get time?