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Love's force

October 8, 2010
By IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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And she loved him, more than words can tell,
Before anyone had even thought to
Care about his shining blue
Dancer’s
Eyes.
Fluttering, her heart she
Gave to him,
Her love she promised forever, “For as long as the rose is considered red”, she breathed.
Icily, he did not accept her
Just reward, he could not believe in love. Too many girls had
Kicked his heart into the dirt,
Like so much disdainfully beheld garbage.
Mortally wounded, she believed she
Needed him, more than water or air, or even, the pale blue of life itself, Out of the many
Other boys in her world, who jostled for a
Place in her coveted heart. “Be my
Queen,” they all offered, proudly
Roaring in their haste. They
Scared her, like a leaf
Trampled in an effort to
Uphold as the prize. She fled their
Vividly colorful offers, “I will clothe you in silks!” “I will crown your head in the most Wondrous of flowers.” She ran away, fleeing through
Xanthan sunlight, the color of living dandelions.
Yearning for love, for that which she could not have from Him.
Zealous, she searched once more.

© Tyson F., Honoka'a, HI

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IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 8 2011 at 2:34 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Oh, that's pretty cool :)
Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Jun. 8 2011 at 2:27 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love. <br /> Henry Drummond

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An acrostic poem is when you line up a word vertically and then each sentence describes something about that word. Your poem isn't exactly an traditional acrostic(because your poem isn't about the alphabet) but I still consider it to be one because the letters are lined up to represent something.

Example of traditional acrostic:

Windy

Ice

Nieves(the spanish word for snow)

Tales told over fire

Easy this season ain't

Raining

IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 8 2011 at 11:26 am
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Thanks, and I have no idea what an acrostic poem is :) Can you tell me?

Yes, I've seen it, and it's interesting that this poem reminds you of that :)

Thanks again :D

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Jun. 7 2011 at 9:32 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love. <br /> Henry Drummond

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That's so cool! :) 

I love how you made such a beautiful acrostic poem. They are very hard to do. :)

This poem reminds me of a lot of things and memories, including the movie Happy Feet when Mumble rejects Gloria because he doesn't think he's worthy of her. Did you ever watch that movie? 

 

IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 20 2010 at 6:03 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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<Ahem, please excuse my hurried spelling, ahile=awhile.>
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 20 2010 at 6:02 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Hahaha, I think it took my sister ahile too :D
Thesilentraven PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 20 2010 at 5:48 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;il piu nell&#039; uno,&quot; (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)<br /> <br /> &quot;Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality&quot; ~Emily Dickinson<br /> <br /> &quot;The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain&quot; <br /> ~Kahlil Gibran

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Wow, I can't believe I didn't notice that. It's like finding Waldo, he's waving and wearing bright red-stripes and an energetic countenance...

And yet it takes a while.

IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 20 2010 at 4:38 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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<Blushes> Thank you ever so much :)

I did it with ABCs, if you can tell. (Or if you can even understand that sentence. I'm not sure I do. But I'm also not sure how to explain it.) It's in an alphabetical format (?)

Thesilentraven PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 19 2010 at 7:41 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;il piu nell&#039; uno,&quot; (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)<br /> <br /> &quot;Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality&quot; ~Emily Dickinson<br /> <br /> &quot;The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain&quot; <br /> ~Kahlil Gibran

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Love, as Joan Baez so wisely sings, is just a four letter word.
Thesilentraven PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 19 2010 at 7:41 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;il piu nell&#039; uno,&quot; (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)<br /> <br /> &quot;Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality&quot; ~Emily Dickinson<br /> <br /> &quot;The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain&quot; <br /> ~Kahlil Gibran

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This, I'm delighted to declare, is far better than most of the love poems I've encountered on this site. The beautifully creative language and detailed story is what makes this 'something different.' Well done, Stargirl, very well done.