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Startle

November 26, 2010
By SMWells PLATINUM, Carlisle, South Carolina
SMWells PLATINUM, Carlisle, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Some truths best left unspoken.


Leaning against a rocky pyre.
I dangle one slipper,
Over the rocky ledge.
If I drop it twill fall,
To a long ways below.
and disapere downstream.
Never be sean again.
But if I through it,
Far out across,
Twould land softly,
In the medow grass.
Were the wind would bind the flowers,
To shield it from sight.
And I would have to go home,
With one slipper two few.
Mom calls me.
I jerk upwrite.
Slipper fals from my hand.
I sping back starteld.
My hand to my throat.
My head slams against...
The bed rail.
Oh.
My slipper lies in the carpet.
Three feet beneath me.
No medow or steam in view.
The rocky ledge,
A cours old quilt.
Daydream ruined.
In one startalling jolt.
That Mom called me,
All that remains real.



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on Jul. 8 2011 at 9:24 am
SMWells PLATINUM, Carlisle, South Carolina
22 articles 0 photos 294 comments

Favorite Quote:
Some truths best left unspoken.

Sure, I supose it wouldn't hurt.

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 10:09 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

Can you post it again but without the typos? It just makes it extremely confusing. 

on Jul. 5 2011 at 2:26 pm
SMWells PLATINUM, Carlisle, South Carolina
22 articles 0 photos 294 comments

Favorite Quote:
Some truths best left unspoken.

I think I noticed the typose, but you'r welcome to point them out in case I missed one.  I was new to teen ink when I placed this one on here, and I guess the results are obvious. Thanks for commenting.

on Jul. 5 2011 at 1:10 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Beautiful, though there are quite a lot of typos, enough to make the poem difficult to really understand and read through smoothly. Would you like me to point them out?

Otherwise, it's very beautiful, and your imagery is spectacular :) I really enjoyed discovering this poem.