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The Rain Dancer

February 19, 2011
By BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
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I dance in your cool embrace
I tip back my head to feel your touch
The ground is slick
With your discarded flesh
Others would slip
But I know you well
Such tricks do not work on me
Unless I want them to

Soon your bright brother
Will drive you away
And claim me
Until then, though
We continue to dance

© Li Z., Chapel Hill, NC

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leafy said...
on Sep. 14 2011 at 7:00 pm
leafy, City, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: I hate it.&nbsp;<br /> Gil: You haven&#039;t even read it yet.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: If it&#039;s bad, I&#039;ll hate it. If it&#039;s good, then I&#039;ll be envious and hate it even more. You don&#039;t want the opinion of another writer.&nbsp;

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Lol I also read this one earlier too :D. I really like the double meanings on this, you're such an amazing writer. 5/5
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 2 2011 at 6:11 pm
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Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Whoa, it took me a bit to figure out that you were speaking of the rain, strangely enough. I think that's good :)
TapTap SILVER said...
on Aug. 4 2011 at 4:39 pm
TapTap SILVER, New Berlin, Wisconsin
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I agree! and i have to say i love the picture of the girl in an arabesque! i'm a dancer so i just have to say that! as always, keep writing!
JoPepper PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 3 2011 at 4:27 pm
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I really like how you compared rain to a person!!!!! Very good!!!! :))
ohheyyyelli SILVER said...
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You are such an amazing writer, I'm jealous.
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This poem feels so real. :) You conveyed the emotions really well.
lucybrown SILVER said...
on Apr. 16 2011 at 4:33 pm
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This is a pretty poem- I like the metaphor you used-'the ground is slick with your discarded flesh' I'd never thought about rain that way before. 

Keep it up, I loved this!

leafy said...
on Apr. 2 2011 at 7:28 pm
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Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: I hate it.&nbsp;<br /> Gil: You haven&#039;t even read it yet.&nbsp;<br /> Ernest Hemingway: If it&#039;s bad, I&#039;ll hate it. If it&#039;s good, then I&#039;ll be envious and hate it even more. You don&#039;t want the opinion of another writer.&nbsp;

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i liked this poem, keep up the good work!