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The Day after Thanksgiving MAG

April 17, 2011
By Nora2012 BRONZE, Tenafly, New Jersey
Nora2012 BRONZE, Tenafly, New Jersey
4 articles 13 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"One who throws mud has no ground."


Resplendent smiles
Dance on our lips.
So long ago
Since we were
Together
Sisters and friends.

Our stomachs hold
The weight
Of last night's turkey
And relief
After whispering
Our fears, failures,
Pressures, and pride
Together.

Four forks in hand,
We dig inside
To expose
The gooey
Sweet apple.
The crisp buttery
Crust cracks,
Revealing a cinnamon scent
Wafting and swirling,
Consuming
Us

We savor the taste
Touch
Tranquility
In a minute

Gone


The author's comments:
I wrote this poem because I wanted to catch the happiness I felt with my friends and sister. We shared stories poured our hearts to each other- truly bliss. We only see each other about twice a year which is heartbreaking. The poem is a metaphor; the pie represented us being together and savoring life while it lasts.
I made description that paints a picture in my head and makes me go hungry. I added some vocabulary and descriptive words to make the pie come alive. I added alliteration for a better flow. I made line breaks for emphasis. In my revisions I tried to make the meaning show clearly. I think I could work on connecting the pie to friendship because the relationship is a bit unclear. I am giving the poem to my friends and Sophia.

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Nora2012 said...
on May. 29 2013 at 7:54 pm
To otherpoet:
I know it's been awhile since you posted (and since I have gone on to teen ink), but I just wanted to say thank you! It means a lot to me that you enjoyed the poem. :)

Nora2012 said...
on May. 29 2013 at 7:54 pm
To otherpoet:
I know it's been awhile since you posted (and since I have gone on to teen ink), but I just wanted to say thank you! It means a lot to me that you enjoyed the poem. :)

on Dec. 23 2011 at 12:06 pm
otherpoet SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
6 articles 9 photos 254 comments

Favorite Quote:
"For beautiful eyes, look for the good in others; for beautiful lips, speak only words of kindness; and for poise, walk with the knowledge that you are never alone." - Audrey Hepburn

I've heard that sometimes Teen Ink edits the work they put in the magazine. They probably posted the edited version. I hope that helps! I love both versions, they really communicate the bond you have with your sister!

on Dec. 8 2011 at 3:53 pm
Nora2012 BRONZE, Tenafly, New Jersey
4 articles 13 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"One who throws mud has no ground."

noo it isnt do u subscribe to teen ink? the poem under my name is actually my poem not this one... here it is :

Resplendent smiles

Dance on our lips.

So long ago

Since we saw us,

Sisters and friends,

Together.

 

Our stomachs hold

The happy weight

Of last night’s turkey

And relief

After whispering

Our fears, failures,

Pressures, pride

Together.

 

Four forks in hand,

We dig inside

To        expose

The gooey

Sweet apple

The crisp buttery

Crust cracks

Revealing a cinnamon scent

Wafting and swirling,

Consuming

Us

 

We savor the taste

Touch

Tranquility

In a minute                                                                                                        Gone


on Dec. 6 2011 at 11:50 pm
ms.nerdalicious GOLD, Orlando, Florida
16 articles 1 photo 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;A bird doesn&#039;t sing because it has an answer, it sings because it has a song.&quot; <br /> &mdash; Maya Angelou

i like it though!

on Dec. 6 2011 at 11:50 pm
ms.nerdalicious GOLD, Orlando, Florida
16 articles 1 photo 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;A bird doesn&#039;t sing because it has an answer, it sings because it has a song.&quot; <br /> &mdash; Maya Angelou

huh? not yours?

on Dec. 3 2011 at 10:03 pm
Nora2012 BRONZE, Tenafly, New Jersey
4 articles 13 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;One who throws mud has no ground.&quot;

This is not my poem. Some one else's peom is posted in my works. Can someone clear the confusion?