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May 7, 2011
By Anonymous

look around you and see the years you've missed the birthdays the dates the broken hearts
look around and what do you see except for a broken heart child with a unspeakable past because of you
look around and see the daughter you left to help her self find her own daddy one who would say shes beatiful and smart
look around see my name on the door telling you that i have found my niche
look around at the hurt and the pain and ask yourself was "freedom" worth it ?

© Anonymous

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my dad he hurt me and im bitter about it
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idc-wat-they-think SILVER said...
on Dec. 23 2011 at 3:56 pm
idc-wat-they-think SILVER, Augusta, Georgia
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every sinner has a future every saint has a past

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thanks pen and yes i have been working on that disiple thanks also and its not you fault dont apologize :) but thank you for the sympathy
idc-wat-they-think SILVER said...
on Dec. 23 2011 at 3:54 pm
idc-wat-they-think SILVER, Augusta, Georgia
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well it is what i feel sometimes when i think of my father thank you and yes i am working on improving my grammar
R5andParamore BRONZE said...
on Dec. 23 2011 at 3:48 pm
R5andParamore BRONZE, Manalapan, New Jersey
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i really like this. im sorry! by the way
TheEldritchPrince SILVER said...
on Dec. 23 2011 at 3:46 pm
TheEldritchPrince SILVER, Stockbridge, Georgia
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Kinda sad. I'm afraid I don't fully follow. Some punctuation would help miles.
Pen2Paper BRONZE said...
on Dec. 23 2011 at 5:50 am
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This is really great. I love the personaliy in the poem. U can tell a lot of feeling has gone into it. do agree with CarrieAnn13 though, grammer and punctuation could do with some work.
idc-wat-they-think SILVER said...
on Dec. 22 2011 at 5:34 pm
idc-wat-they-think SILVER, Augusta, Georgia
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thank you and yes i know i mest up on grmmar lol but thank u still
CarrieAnn13 GOLD said...
on Dec. 22 2011 at 5:32 pm
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Excellent work! My only criticism is that even though this is a free verse poem, punctuation and proper capitalization are very important and appreciated. Other than that, I think this is a great poem. Keep writing! :)
idc-wat-they-think SILVER said...
on Dec. 22 2011 at 5:26 pm
idc-wat-they-think SILVER, Augusta, Georgia
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thank you and i would love to send me the link and ill give you feedback :)
Matice BRONZE said...
on Dec. 22 2011 at 3:26 pm
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Great job! I enjoyed reading that. It was a very cute poem. :) If you have a spare minute, I'd be honored if you were able to take a look at some of my work. Feedback means a lot to me.