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Princess

May 22, 2011
By ZeldaEve GOLD, Lansing, Michigan
ZeldaEve GOLD, Lansing, Michigan
13 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Her heart is covered in scars,
But they are nothing,
Nothing at all like,
The ones that cover her arms.

She hides herself in shame,
Letting the pain pile high,
She finds herself drowning,
In all the loss and gain.

She is letting go,
Letting go of this cruel world,
Leaving nothing to find,
Surely she will be going to Hell.

No one tries to stop her,
They just stand back and watch,
Watch the princess loss her crown,
Will this be the end of it all?

The author's comments:
Please comment. I would like to know what I can do to improve my writings.

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ZeldaEve GOLD said...
on Jul. 18 2011 at 10:33 am
ZeldaEve GOLD, Lansing, Michigan
13 articles 0 photos 8 comments
Thank you for pointing that out, I hadn't noticed it before you mentioned it.

sakina GOLD said...
on Jul. 18 2011 at 10:26 am
sakina GOLD, Chennai, Other
18 articles 13 photos 173 comments

Favorite Quote:
A negative thinker See's a difficulty in every opportunity but a positive thinker sees an opportunity in every difficulty. So always think positive and u'll surely B successful in LIFE.
-Hazrat Ali (A.S)

It's a great poem...

But in the last para u've written loss instead of lose...well that must be a typo...Other than it's a great piece...


ZeldaEve GOLD said...
on Jul. 17 2011 at 11:57 am
ZeldaEve GOLD, Lansing, Michigan
13 articles 0 photos 8 comments
Thank you.

on Jul. 16 2011 at 4:52 pm
x-CaptainMonica-x BRONZE, Alpena, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"It's not a statement as much as just a move of passion."

very moving

ZeldaEve GOLD said...
on Jun. 22 2011 at 11:13 am
ZeldaEve GOLD, Lansing, Michigan
13 articles 0 photos 8 comments
Thank you for the feedback.

on Jun. 21 2011 at 10:37 am
Finding-me PLATINUM, Dover-Foxcroft, Maine
45 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's kind of fun to do the impossible

you have a good grasp on poetry, and i like your style, it sounds a bit choppy tho, u could try to let it flow a bit more. :)