AMAZING!

I really connected with the poem and felt the emotion throughout. Keep it up!

i like how you set up your poem :) Very nicely done. Though while reading it, i felt (just a bit) that some words were used for the sake of rhyming. The poem would be even cooler if you used some symbols of anger and hurt-----like a cold mysterious poem instead of a hard, direct one.

Overall, this deserves 4 stars.

The thing about poetry is you either like it or you don't... I think your poems are good but they didn't do anything for me. I'm a hit-or-miss kind of guy with poetry and I never know what I'm going to like unless it's really twisted or something.

A personal preference of mine is complex poems. Something abstract... something symbolic. Something that makes no sense at all even. I don't know how to explain my taste in poetry. I write stuff like this all the time, but the stuff I REALLY love of mine is like the stuff that just came out of nowhere. Like I got high one time and wrote a poem that made absolutely no sense, but there were a couple lines that were really really awesome.

So yeah don't know what kind of criticism I can give for poetry haha