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Withering Trees

June 22, 2011
By WishfulDoer GOLD, Portland, Oregon
WishfulDoer GOLD, Portland, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
If ignorance is bliss, why is our country so complicated?


Withering tree,
Your light has dulled,
Your leaves have fallen,
And your trunk is twisted with knots.

Twisted tree,
Your limbs are gnarled,
Your shadow resembles a cobweb,
And your roots stick up like bones from the ground.

Ancient tree,
Your trunk is hollow from past residents,
The grass at your feet is no longer silk,
And your face has turned into a mask.

Dying tree,
My dear old grandmother tree,
My sweet haven from memories tree,
Remember me.


The author's comments:
My inspiration for this piece was the book, "The Giving Tree" by Shel Silverstein. If you haven't read it, please do; it'll be worth it.

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InkWriter13 said...
on Jun. 21 2012 at 12:47 pm
WOW! What a beautiful poem. I loved every part of it. Absolutely beautiful. Great work. Superb writing. A true writing voice. Wonderful, wonderful. :) Would you please comment on my poem titled the Printer?

on Jun. 20 2012 at 10:41 am
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper<br /> <br /> Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

AWWWW that was nice.... =)

on Jul. 27 2011 at 1:24 pm
emanmkhan SILVER, Austin, Texas
7 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
\&quot;People will forget what you said. People will forget what you did. But people will never forget how you made them feel.\&quot; Maya Angelou

I LOVE THE GIVING TREEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!! AND I REALLY LOVE THIS POEM!!! Sorry, got too excited. I just love that your inspiration created such a pondering poem. Keep up the great writing!

on Jul. 24 2011 at 11:45 pm
NinjaGirl BRONZE, Valley City, North Dakota
1 article 0 photos 202 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only thing holding us back in life is our desire to stay where we are and not venture further.<br /> ~Some random person on the Internet :P

I like the calm voice you used. Really great poem!

on Jul. 18 2011 at 1:40 pm
Internal-Love PLATINUM, Queens, New York
33 articles 3 photos 310 comments

Favorite Quote:
Nothing&#039;s black or white, its all just a shade of gray---<br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> TI &quot;Live your Life&quot; ft Rihanna

this poem smoothly took me through an aging tree and its life span in a short amount of time. I rated this piece also

austenite GOLD said...
on Jul. 8 2011 at 1:06 pm
austenite GOLD, River Falls, Wisconsin
13 articles 0 photos 177 comments

Favorite Quote:
...one word from you will silence me forever. If, however, your feelings have changed, I will have to tell you: you have bewitched me, body and soul, and I love....I love...I love you. I never wish to be parted from you from this day on. -Mr. Darcy

I really liked this poem! I agree with Zinaidia, the calm and reserved tone you used in this poem totally works. It was great :)

on Jul. 8 2011 at 7:24 am
Zinaidia SILVER, Moreno Valley, California
8 articles 3 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
\\\&quot;Whatever you are, be a good one.\\\&quot;

Hmm, this was interesting. I would not have expected this poem from you, you usually have a very strong powerful voice, but in this one it is quiet and kind of reserved. which totally works by the way! Good poem, you have talent