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Abominations

August 1, 2011
By Eirias SILVER, Spring, Texas
Eirias SILVER, Spring, Texas
5 articles 0 photos 71 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you wish to be a writer, write" -Epictetus


Abominations

There are monsters in my closet,

Fiends,

Menaces.
They terrorize me once a week.

They wait for the chance,

Lurking,

Hiding,
Biding their time for revenge.

They stalk the dark,
Filling my dreams with horrors,

Gruesome thoughts,

Relentless fear.

One sits on a hanger,

Its nest,

Its lair,
Ready to squeeze:
An anaconda.

One waits in a box,
Submerged in the shadows,
Ready to swallow,

To gnaw,

To feed:
An alligator.

One hangs on a peg,
Long and lithe,
Ready to choke and suffocate:
A garrote.

I long to be rid of them,

To hide from them.
But they pervade my sleep,
Turning my fantasies to nightmares.

I try to run away,

To flee the scene.
Yet they force me, compel me . . .
To wear them to church.


The author's comments:
I went to an award ceremony. It didn't specify how do dress, so I showed up in my typical carpenter pants and tennis shoes. My buddy (who was actually under-dressed) showed up in slacks and dress shoes.

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on Aug. 3 2012 at 12:30 am
Kiki_McGee GOLD, Woodstock, Illinois
16 articles 16 photos 72 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Hope is the thing with feathers that perches in the soul - and sings the tunes without the words - and never stops at all." - Emily Dickinson

Hahaha! I must admit that I got a bit of a kick out of this one! All that suspense built up around the monsters and then... BOOM, you had to wear them to church! I definitely understand that feeling!

Eirias SILVER said...
on Aug. 2 2012 at 10:26 pm
Eirias SILVER, Spring, Texas
5 articles 0 photos 71 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you wish to be a writer, write" -Epictetus

Well, as far as I'm concerned, my poems AREN'T anything to gloat about . . . but that doesn't mean I can't give good criticism. One of my chess teachers--his rating is actually lower than mine, but he's just a much better teacher than player. He actually coached one of the nations junior champions.

If anything, I'm more proud of my editing skills than my writing ability. I'm probably more likely to be an editor than a writer. What's most important is that I'll actually give a real critique to a piece. I won't just say, "Good Job! Keep Writing!" when I'm really thinking "there is nothing in this piece to make it stand out from the thousands of other pieces on this site," and that kind of critiquing is what makes a writer better. In chess, It's easy to determine how good you are (either you win or lose to someone with X rating), but in writing, your only gauge is others' feedback. So how can you improve if others aren't telling you how good/bad/average it really is? It also helps to give specific suggestions, which many people just aren't willing to take the time to do.


on Aug. 1 2012 at 11:24 pm
VandalSpirit DIAMOND, Pleasant Prairie, Wisconsin
51 articles 9 photos 186 comments

Favorite Quote:
Yet this I call to mind and therefore I have hope: Because of Gods great love, we are not consumed. His compassion never fail. They are new every morning; great is your faithfulness.

When I first saw your thread about hard-core comments on everyone's poetry I was very skeptical that you would be one of those that criticizes others when their poems aren't anything to gloat about. But you're really fantastic!  Definitely a 5/5!

on Jul. 26 2012 at 11:38 am
Behind_a_Plastic_Smile GOLD, Roseville, California
17 articles 1 photo 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"if you're not 1st you're last"

haha! love it 5/5 so intese the rise all leading up to that last line, just gold 

butterfly123 said...
on Jun. 11 2012 at 8:17 am
butterfly123, Banglore, Other
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hey! nice one. i like the whole concept of the poem and its choppiness. ...although at one point i felt that the emotion was forced. but apart from that: great work and keep writing :D

on Aug. 4 2011 at 7:30 pm
JerseyGirl716 BRONZE, Central, New Jersey
2 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We gain strength, and courage, and confidence by each experience in which we really stop to look fear in the face... we must do that which we think we cannot." -Eleanor Roosevelt

This is absolutely HYSTERICAL! That last line=gold. Yet another awesome job, FIVE stars!

on Aug. 4 2011 at 5:32 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

Maybe, that's usually my policy if I rate it lower than 4 then I explain why!!! How did you get your work submitted within one day!!!!!!! ;D

Eirias SILVER said...
on Aug. 3 2011 at 8:54 pm
Eirias SILVER, Spring, Texas
5 articles 0 photos 71 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you wish to be a writer, write" -Epictetus

And he/she did it again!!!! This is not cool!

Eirias said...
on Aug. 3 2011 at 6:44 pm
Thanks! I wonder if they (sorry, that's bad grammar--maybe he, but then it seems like most of you active people are female, but would that negate the assumed masculine rule?) just wanted to ruin the poem's rating . . . or maybe he/she was mad because I didn't give their poem a good review, even though my policy is not to rate unless I can give them a 5.

on Aug. 3 2011 at 5:10 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

They should!!!!!  But I thought it was great!!!!!!! :)

Eirias said...
on Aug. 3 2011 at 3:08 pm
Hey! Whoever gave this a 1 out of 5 stars should have the courtesy of telling my why!

on Aug. 3 2011 at 10:45 am
JTboiiDrama PLATINUM, Chicago, Illinois
27 articles 0 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is what it is

I like it!!

on Aug. 2 2011 at 7:26 pm
TwasBrilling BRONZE, Staunton, Va, Virginia
4 articles 0 photos 79 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The owl of Minerva spreads its wings only with the falling of the dusk" -H.W. Hegel

"Words are our most inexhaustable source of magic' -Albus Dumbledore

Nice ending! I though it was some sort of teen-angst peom...(I really hate those) but it turned out to be humorous!

Eirias SILVER said...
on Aug. 2 2011 at 5:34 pm
Eirias SILVER, Spring, Texas
5 articles 0 photos 71 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you wish to be a writer, write" -Epictetus

Please, by all means add it to favorites! Thanks!

on Aug. 2 2011 at 4:47 pm
xXx_Fox_xXx BRONZE, Conbe, Iowa
4 articles 1 photo 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Where a rose is, a thistle can not grow" ~The Secret Garden
"Be the change you wish to see in the world" ~Ghandi
"Every road leads somewhere, its just a matter of where you want to go..." ~???

I lovw the last line. This poem is extremely creative and orginal. I LOVE it. Do you mind if I add it to favorites?