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Empty Promise

September 11, 2011
By Erecura PLATINUM, Eugene, Oregon
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Erecura PLATINUM, Eugene, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
"Hell is empty; all the devils are here."
The tempest

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He sits there.
Head in hands.
His daughter's voice echoes in his hollow mind.
It was
Horrific.
Beautiful
in a stark,
dead,
sort of way.
He kissed her goodbye,
and she
made him promise
to come home.
And today
houses
blown apart
magnificent explosions
so many colors
and he
shielded his eyes
and wondered
about her last wods to him.
"Come home."
and now he sees
that it is nearly impossible
not to
end up
a bloody
corpse
upon the great battlefield.
And he tries to
fuffil his
promise
but they are
empty
words
and his daughter sits alone
waiting
for a father
who will
never
return.

© Mary G., Ridgway, PA

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Basketball23 SILVER said...
on Oct. 14 2011 at 4:50 pm
Basketball23 SILVER, Pine Grove, Pennsylvania
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"Time still turns the pages of the book it's burned" -Avenged Sevenfold (So Far Away)

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This is amazing <3  At first I thought it was the daughter that died, but then at the end it reveals that it was the father that died serving.  This is very emotional and reaches out to all of those families who has lost someone in wars.
RyanTyler PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 6 2011 at 10:02 am
RyanTyler PLATINUM, Windsor, Connecticut
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"A myth is a religion in which no one no longer believes." James Feibleman

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Really deep, really good.
Mystiecub said...
on Sep. 30 2011 at 2:49 pm
O.O. This is a really deep poem...it really makes me feel sorry for the families of deceased military personnel