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The Dancing Lights

November 20, 2011
By sweetheart2598 SILVER, Atlatna, Georgia
sweetheart2598 SILVER, Atlatna, Georgia
5 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
Lord Yes


It is something that I can't describe
I turn my head
All of the lights consume me
They dance in their beautiful costumes
Filling the night sky
Small children stare with wonder and excitement
Their little fingers point to one light
While they describe every detail of its journey
The sparks come down to earth
They invite you to join them
When you rise up
They show off their beauty and grace
Taking you to far off places
Where only happiness lives
When they display their grand finally
Millions of people cheer
Roaring like the one of a jungle cat
While you dancing lights take a bow
And walk off stage


The author's comments:
My cousin and I went to go watch fireworks for Christmas.It was my first time ever seeing a fireworks show. They were all really pretty. Every time you heard a pop it was a new display which was really cool. The were so great that i felt like writing about it.

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on Nov. 26 2011 at 8:55 pm
swiftheart GOLD, Houston, Texas
17 articles 5 photos 81 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If someone were to pay you 10 cents for every kind word you ever spoke and collect 5 cents for every unkind word, would you be rich or poor?"

I liked it. The wording was good and every aspect played into its flow.

pinkowl BRONZE said...
on Nov. 25 2011 at 11:03 pm
pinkowl BRONZE, Tyrone, Pennsylvania
3 articles 0 photos 109 comments

Favorite Quote:
Jeremiah 29:11

SO CUTE. made me think of my early childhood!

on Nov. 25 2011 at 11:00 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 564 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

AWESOME POEM! <3 So pretty...

on Nov. 25 2011 at 6:01 pm
sweetheart2598 SILVER, Atlatna, Georgia
5 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
Lord Yes

THANX 4 ALL THE COMMENTS GUYS

on Nov. 25 2011 at 5:38 pm
slaborin98 BRONZE, Salem, Oregon
2 articles 0 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"Live like no tomorrow\"

i think you have a gift for taking things so small and turning it into something BIG

TapTap SILVER said...
on Nov. 25 2011 at 5:31 pm
TapTap SILVER, New Berlin, Wisconsin
8 articles 0 photos 146 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dream as if you'll live forever, love like there is no tomorrow, dance like there is no one watching.

beautiful! never thought of it like this! fantastically written

on Nov. 25 2011 at 5:31 pm
dbk1098 PLATINUM, Rockville, Maryland
20 articles 0 photos 40 comments
Love this!!! 

on Nov. 25 2011 at 5:29 pm
AnimaCordis GOLD, London, Other
13 articles 0 photos 131 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Evil is when the good do nothing"

I really love this, it's beautiful

The ending was wonderful.


cookiegirl said...
on Nov. 25 2011 at 9:06 am
Wow, this is well written:). this poem is beautiful.

on Nov. 24 2011 at 9:16 pm
sweetheart2598 SILVER, Atlatna, Georgia
5 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
Lord Yes

Thank Ya'll for all the nice comments

THANK U and i'll try to read some of ya'lls writing as well

TANKS SO MUCH

 


on Nov. 24 2011 at 9:05 pm
Heck_No_Cheerios BRONZE, Atlanta, Georgia
1 article 0 photos 1 comment
Oh wow! This is wonderful, I love the image it creates. You can just picture the children all excited pointing and shouting in their excitement of the bright lights you describe.

on Nov. 24 2011 at 8:26 pm
megsloveslions GOLD, Thomasville, Pennsylvania
11 articles 0 photos 71 comments

Favorite Quote:
Live like there's no tommorow

I love it! I really liked the descriptions!

on Nov. 24 2011 at 8:22 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
1 article 0 photos 1979 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

-gasp- :D that's soo pretty!! omg I love it.. it's so lively and exciting

on Nov. 24 2011 at 8:22 pm
Wonderment DIAMOND, Scranton, Pennsylvania
75 articles 0 photos 141 comments
 l love this. I love the images it paints, I love the metaphors, I love the way it is. Great poem!

on Nov. 24 2011 at 4:28 pm
Prometheus PLATINUM, East Aurora, New York
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Great metaphors and imagery!

Neytiri GOLD said...
on Nov. 24 2011 at 4:24 pm
Neytiri GOLD, Hilo, Hawaii
14 articles 0 photos 67 comments

Favorite Quote:
Live as if you'll die today. Dream as if you'll live forever.

It's beautiful sweetheart!!!! I love that time of year and you portrayed it so beautifully!!x x x x

on Nov. 23 2011 at 8:20 pm
XxMidnightKissxX SILVER, Hardinsburg, Indiana
7 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love me or hate me, I don't care which, just don't try and change me.

I really like this! Great job. :)

on Nov. 23 2011 at 2:54 pm
sweetheart2598 SILVER, Atlatna, Georgia
5 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
Lord Yes

Thanks for all the comments and ratings

on Nov. 23 2011 at 2:44 pm
Kayla12w BRONZE, Clearfield, Utah
2 articles 1 photo 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's not Normal to be Normal.

I like it... I'm just kidding, I really don't.

 

 

I LOVE IT!!!

 


M_IML DIAMOND said...
on Nov. 23 2011 at 2:33 pm
M_IML DIAMOND, Ganei Tikva, Other
78 articles 0 photos 61 comments

very nice :) love that you took something a lot of people take a little bit for granted and made it so special!

also the "dancing lights" part is great...beautiful.