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On the Eve of War

November 19, 2011
By lilmartz PLATINUM, Perrysburg, Ohio
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lilmartz PLATINUM, Perrysburg, Ohio
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The beginning of September
Cool air filled the atmosphere
As the world shivered in excitement

A thunderous voice roared
Breaking the hesitant silence
Rallying it’s troops

We will not give up
We will be victorious
We will not rest

Newspapers scurried to break the news
Radios blared blazing headlines
But the writing was already on the wall

A mixture of sobs and sweat
The news stapled the permanent ink
Tattooing the unfortunate events

© Greg R., Wichita Falls, KS

The author's comments:
This piece was inspired by The Book Thief by Markus Zusak and the events of World War 2.
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codyabenbow PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 2 2012 at 11:15 am
codyabenbow PLATINUM, Kailua Kona, Hawaii
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For the most part I really do like this poem. However, to add more emotion, you should show us the emotion. Don't just tell us there were tears. Tells us what they looked like, what people looked like. Make it easier to relate to. The line "It was already written on the wall" was amazing. Try to use more lines like that, more symbolic. Symbolism adds power. The more you make us think, it has to make sense though, the better.
SarasotaWonder BRONZE said...
on Dec. 19 2011 at 2:34 pm
SarasotaWonder BRONZE, Cumberland, Maine
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Great job with the emotion in this piece....I really feel like I AM there at the eve of the war. Also, I really like the splitting of the piece using the "We..." stanza....Overall it has a nice format, rythmn, and beat and I enjoyed reading it. :)