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Aloof
Down the dark hole
 There is a sight
 A white kite
 That has blown
 Through winds
 And sailed seas
 That’s dreamed the dreams
 Of heightened heaves
 Shuddered in frost
 Burned in heat
 Orange leaves fall off the tress
 Onto my hair
 Highlights breezed
 The swing it swings 
 As they grow weed
 The moon returns 
 It has been through hell
 You have cast a spell
 My world trembles
 Parallelisms curse
 The shining gun
 Has yet to shoot
 Be careful
 Too aloof
 Not here
 Parallelism is everywhere
 I clench my fist with all my might
 All I can do
 Focus, stare
 Ground myself
 In roots and dirt
 Feel my toes
 Wet grease
 Red nails 
 Tease
 The chair is brown
 The couch is blue
 All I can do is think of you
 Intensity is rare
 Quite a scare
 I can handle
 Take -share?
 Parallelism is care
 Your doings
 Like a tree
 Affecting me
 Not you. Just me
 Don’t you see?
 The voice it’s shrill
 The buzz
 It rings through streets
 Hums through Villas
 May seem far
 But oh so close
 Can’t you hear?
 An overdose
 It never heeds
 Just push and shove
 Through the crowds
 Through gooey mud
 Candles drip
 Wax shrinks
 Control is lost
 Bursts the seed
 Inside out
 Leaving me
 Brain commands
 Desire stands

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I’ve been putting this off for far too long now. I guess it’s because I’m being too unrealistic. That’s probably why. I want to say something special, or at least original, and now I’m sounding weird. It’s 10:16PM. It may not say that when I post this because I’m on the west coast and Teen Ink’s times are all askew for me. But what was I saying? Right. Unrealistic me. I guess I’m sort of bad at responding to poetry because I hardly understand it myself, and I was completely stunned by your comment, by the way. People like you are the reason I’m so addicted to this site (it’s getting out of control. I’m supposed to be writing a novel…). I don’t even really care if people even mean what they say when they compliment me. I’d still feel awesome if I got a comment saying I suck at life, just because I'd know someone read something I wrote. It’s VALIDATION, that’s what it is. Someone out there acknowledging that you did something with your time.
Back on topic. This poem is profound. I can’t think of any other word to describe it. Except, maybe, beautiful. It has a wonderful sound when you read it out loud, and the rhymes almost catch you off guard (in a good way). The parallelism bit is fantastically witty. You can get lost in it, and that means the words are doing their job.
This comment is unnecessarily long. Like I said, I wanted to say something special. Or at least original. I’d say I accomplished that.