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My Soldier

September 10, 2012
By LunaLives GOLD, South Bend, Indiana
LunaLives GOLD, South Bend, Indiana
17 articles 0 photos 237 comments

Favorite Quote:
Because I can!-Me "Life is a choice and death is a decision"-Lil Wayne

My soldier protects me
Protects his country
Keeps us free
Loves me unconditionally
My soldier deserves respect
His support I won't neglect
His fight is the cause
My love is the effect
He is my hero
I could never let go
He is my soldier
I'll be with him forever

The author's comments:
I support every American soldier.

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so_joy SILVER said...
on Sep. 24 2012 at 5:08 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 722 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

This is great, I love it very much. You speak of the soldier very personally, as if he is your relative or someone very close to you. I enjoyed this, please write more. Please read, rate, and comment on my poems! Thanks!

bagley777 GOLD said...
on Sep. 21 2012 at 9:14 pm
bagley777 GOLD, Tucson, Arizona
11 articles 3 photos 62 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love is a two way street. If you find yourself on a one-way road, it's time to take the next turn off.

I really like it. I think it's short and sweet, but says a lot at the same time. You are an amazing writer!(:

on Sep. 13 2012 at 5:27 pm
TraceBatWingsAndBrokenStrings DIAMOND, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
52 articles 0 photos 72 comments

Favorite Quote:
"This gun has stopped time in its tracks, has altered the course of our fate. Destiny is shattered and timeless. Closed eyes feel the cold winds embrace."
-Avenged Sevenfold

I think this is a good pre-set to a finished piece, but it does need some work. There are some good lines, like the cause and effect line, but most of it seems like it needs flushing out. Nice job either way.