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When I Breathe

January 2, 2013
By StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro


Words catch
And bubble
Clawing their way forward at the back of my throat
They burn like fire
Feathers of emotions
Brushing relentlessly
Beneath a pounding skull

And still
I swallow
Pushing down the desperate nails
As they struggle to keep hold
Teeth clench
Blood flows
I roll my lips together
To keep the secrets safe inside



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on Apr. 5 2013 at 8:42 pm
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro

Thank you! Please do let me know if you ever decide to submit anything with your charater in it here. I would love to read about him/her. :)

on Apr. 2 2013 at 5:19 pm
bookmouse BRONZE, Chapel Hill, North Carolina
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Beautiful piece of writing! It reminds me of one of my characters (she's not on TeenInk...)!

on Mar. 11 2013 at 9:42 am
loveissmiles GOLD, Lynn, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"I live for the nights I can't remember with the people I will never forget." -Carassisa M-<3

"What the mind can perceive, the body can achieve." -Softball Coach Steve B-

You have a very powerful vocabulary! abd a elegant writing style. Great job. :)

on Feb. 18 2013 at 11:21 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

Pleasure :)

on Feb. 17 2013 at 12:01 pm
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
56 articles 0 photos 253 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro

I appreciate the critique. :) I did have some difficulty thinking of the title for this. 

on Feb. 17 2013 at 11:24 am
Maggie99 SILVER, Versailles, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
Two roads diverged in a wood, and I I took the one less traveled by, And that has made all the difference. -Robert Frost

Wow. Simply breath-taking.

on Feb. 17 2013 at 9:34 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

Each single component is amazing,...I really love the detaill..Though you could have gone with some other titel...not too obvious but just different..that's all I could point out ....other than that it's beautifully phrased.

on Feb. 16 2013 at 1:21 pm
Mollybug16 BRONZE, Cleveland, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
Impossible is not a word, it's just a reason for someone not to try.

wow really desciptive and relatable... I love it 5 stars. :)

on Feb. 16 2013 at 12:26 pm
thatunknownthing DIAMOND, Dubai, Other
67 articles 0 photos 211 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Yesterday is history, tomorrow is a mystery, but today is a gift; that's why they call it the present"

wow, vivid descriptions! chillingly detailed, simple and effective. 4/5!

on Feb. 16 2013 at 8:25 am
bruisedmemories ELITE, Birdsboro, Pennsylvania
109 articles 10 photos 62 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you're young, you can fly, but we trip on clouds 'cause we get too high" -The Band Perry (Song: Don't Let Me Be Lonely)
"Cause no matter what, you'll never be alone" -Lady Antebellum (Song: Compass)

Nice use of imagery! I can easily relate! Don't ever stop writing!

on Feb. 15 2013 at 10:00 pm
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
56 articles 0 photos 253 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro

  Major thanks to all of you! I am so happy you enjoyed this!

on Feb. 15 2013 at 8:35 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Oh my gosh, the imagery in this poem was beautiful! I could definitely relate to it:)

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on Feb. 14 2013 at 7:29 pm
Kris_10 GOLD, North Scituate, Rhode Island
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Favorite Quote:
"It is not the critic who counts; not the man who points out how the strong man stumbles... The credit belongs to the man who is actually in the arena, whose face is marred by dust and sweat and blood..." -Theodore Roosevelt

I really like this. It is short but to the point. You said just what you needed to say    

on Feb. 13 2013 at 8:50 pm
TheHerbArtist SILVER, Paradise, California
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I love your word usage. This poem describes perfectly what it is like to want to say something, but you cant.