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When I Die

January 5, 2013
By Blaque SILVER, Oklahoma, Oklahoma
Blaque SILVER, Oklahoma, Oklahoma
8 articles 0 photos 22 comments

I wonder what the after life looks like. I wonder is is crowded, will I finally be seen by others or another disappointment. When I look at you and I truly see you. You bring me joy, not pain, but you're at the edge of the earth. I'm trying to hold you I'm begging you to breathe and to not let go...but you're out of reach. So then I grab at the dirt of the earth leeching holding on to life. I try so hard not to cry, I see you giving up but i scream and you can't hear me I'm blinking twice. I soon open my eyes and there you are standing before me I can feel you now and I can feel now your at ease presence this is the never ending present its today or never. I love you


The author's comments:
This is my life.

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Blaque SILVER said...
on Jun. 6 2013 at 2:36 am
Blaque SILVER, Oklahoma, Oklahoma
8 articles 0 photos 22 comments
Thank you I will keep that in mind

on Mar. 21 2013 at 7:47 pm
Under-the-Rain GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Are you ready to go to battle with your mind?- Written by me :)
Lost the battle, win the war//Bringing my sinking ship back to the shore- Paramore, Now

I liked it, it made me reflect on my own life, but i believe that you could have made this poem deeper, and when i say deeper, i do not nessaryly mean personal, you can make a poem deeper by using more imsgery or oxymorons. 

Blaque SILVER said...
on Jan. 19 2013 at 5:55 pm
Blaque SILVER, Oklahoma, Oklahoma
8 articles 0 photos 22 comments
sniff sniff no one replied