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A Tropical Paradise MAG

September 10, 2008
By Madison Fisher PLATINUM, New City, New York
Madison Fisher PLATINUM, New City, New York
28 articles 2 photos 2 comments

Lying on the beach
With sunglasses on your face
Shielding the harsh sunlight from your eyes.
You cover your skin with SPF 25.
Sand makes its way into your sandals,
but you don’t mind.
Off in the distance music is being played
on steel drums.
They set the mood of your whole vacation:
relaxation.
You see the boats drift by with their brightly
colored sides
And you hold onto your tropical drink that tastes
like bananas
With its tiny umbrella hanging off the side.
It makes you smile.
You wonder if the sailors on the boat are as
peaceful as you are.
Worries escape you as you drift into your own oasis
And your home life becomes something of the past.
Almost unreal.
You smell coconut everywhere you go
And wonder if you’ll miss it when you leave.
All you hear is the crashing of the waves.
All you can feel is your newly burnt skin.
All that matters is nothing.



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on Sep. 21 2010 at 6:34 pm
DaydreamBeliever GOLD, Lockport, Other
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Favorite Quote:
If you live to be one hundred, I want to live to be one hundred minus one day, so that I'll never have to live without you. -Winnie the Pooh

I absolutley loved it :) I'm one of those people who live for the beach though :P

on Sep. 21 2010 at 6:04 pm
emily12321 BRONZE, Kansas City, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"The best way to predict the future is to create it."- Abraham Lincoln

That is just like my trips to Mexico!

I loved it!


Kaptain SILVER said...
on Sep. 21 2010 at 8:33 am
Kaptain SILVER, Dubai, Other
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That was not bad..

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Kaptain SILVER said...
on Sep. 21 2010 at 8:32 am
Kaptain SILVER, Dubai, Other
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would love to know what u guys think about my stuff.. please do check it out..

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Kaptain SILVER said...
on Sep. 21 2010 at 8:30 am
Kaptain SILVER, Dubai, Other
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That was good..

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ellie315 GOLD said...
on Aug. 30 2010 at 9:41 pm
ellie315 GOLD, South Pasadena, California
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Favorite Quote:
"And this, our life, exempt from public haunt, finds tongues in trees, books in the running brooks, sermons in stones, and good in everything." -- William Shakespeare

this flows really well; which is really good because since the poem is about relaxing on the beach and sinking into this state where nothing else matters, if the poem was awkard and abrupt and choppy, well it just wouldnt work.

good job! reminds me of my vacation in hawaii


. said...
on Aug. 30 2010 at 9:16 pm
ROck on!! This sure hit the spot. Luv your flow of descriptions and your overall writing style. I could easily picture this scene in my head. makes me want to go to the beach right now!! :D

on Aug. 30 2010 at 6:47 pm
on vacation on the beach in the bahamas right now  an i like this better!

GaelicC said...
on Aug. 30 2010 at 9:59 am
GaelicC, Longford, Other
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Favorite Quote:
No -Rosa Parks

Wow that was really good! Loved your discriptions and your setting...It is a nice, relaxing, peaceful poem- can't wait to hear your next one!

on Aug. 8 2010 at 1:47 pm
starlight26 GOLD, Miramar, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
*life isnt about pretending to be something you're not. It about being who you are and finding someone
who loves every bit of it."

"Life's tradegy is that we get old too soon and wise too late"

I agree :)

on Aug. 8 2010 at 1:47 pm
starlight26 GOLD, Miramar, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
*life isnt about pretending to be something you're not. It about being who you are and finding someone
who loves every bit of it."

"Life's tradegy is that we get old too soon and wise too late"

I loved the beautiful description! I could really relate to it but yes, i do think it could have had more emotion .And maybe an idea that the poem revolves around? But then again, this is a very relaxing and inspiration-based poem so overall, it just depends on your point of view. Personally, I think you did a great job!! :) Check out some of my work if you'd like!

on Aug. 8 2010 at 8:46 am
deus-ex-machina14 BRONZE, Stewartsville, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"There are two main tragedies in life. One is not getting what one wants, and the other is getting it." -Oscar Wilde

Phenomenal! Keep writing like this and you could publish a book one day:)

on Aug. 8 2010 at 8:06 am
DifferentTeen PLATINUM, Seaford, Delaware
32 articles 2 photos 329 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There’s no such thing as true love, just spurts of insanity—falling over and over again, thinking that won’t happen to me"

I agree, it was very good but just, blah you know?

whalecare said...
on Jul. 17 2010 at 2:37 pm
This is impeciable !  you did an amazing job capturing it. I could feel myself slipping deeper and deeper into an undisturbed sleep, with waves crashing against my toes while i watch as attractive tanned men walk by my newly freckled face

on Jun. 25 2010 at 8:04 pm
shootingdreams SILVER, Paoli, Pennsylvania
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I third! I just kind of don't see the..passion and emotion...

It doesn't lift me up. Sure, going to the beach is great, but why should it matter?


on Jun. 25 2010 at 6:55 pm
shelterisland GOLD, Montclair, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
-Biting's excellent. It's like kissing only there's a winner."-Doctor Who, The Tardis

i thought it was alright. idk. while i was reading it i kept thinking i was going to find out something that happened to the person, or something like that, but then nothing happened. it was just a description of a day at the beach. peaceful, but lacking in emotion and depth.

DW SILVER said...
on Jun. 3 2010 at 11:17 pm
DW SILVER, Denver, Colorado
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ya same here. it was alright :)

on Jun. 3 2010 at 7:18 pm
VioletsandVoice, Spiritwood, North Dakota
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i really liked reading this piece. i just flew home from florida and it was absolutely depressing for my vacation to end but this describes pretty well how i felt while i was there

on Jun. 3 2010 at 6:48 pm
SarahJumps SILVER, Richmond, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
Great minds discuss ideas; average minds discuss events; small minds discuss people.
-Eleanor Roosevelt

I think, at a child's birth, if a mother could ask a fairy godmother to endow it with the most useful gift, that gift should be curiosity. -E.R

i like the eneding lines :)

on Jun. 3 2010 at 3:25 pm
Syarra_Greenwood BRONZE, Andover, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
Smile, happy looks good on you!!! ( :

it was a decent poem but not all together the best i hav ever read maybe if u like put something behind it it would be better idk but keep it up and ull find ur place (: