Redemption | Teen Ink


May 15, 2013
By Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 433 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

For you I will cross the endless mounds into redemption,
Because I know I have messed up, I am but one soul,
With needs that seeds and grows to more that I expected,
But I see that these needs have lead me farther from you,
And for that I know nothing will rewrite the history that has happen,
But for you my one,my soul I will climb the thousands stairs to forgiveness,
I will vest the dragon, if it means to see you again,
I'm in and out of this broken road but I see you,
perfect Is what you are thy beauty is never finer,
In this Topsy turvy world you were what kept me afloat on this path of amazement,
you were what brought me back from the cloud you were my salvation my desire to be better,
you were my hope my faith until you left that day now my days are black and numerous,
my eyes drifting to the memories you left behind,
your sadness is my crack that brings me to the brink of death,
your my drug the thing that makes me happy,
your my life the thing that matters most,
If you leave the river we have dug away to make the world we thought would come true,
the river would consume me and drown the sorrows away so...
please think about that as you pull the trigger,
your the anchor I your rope,
your the noose and I the hope,
so walk away from the path you chose and return again to our river of hope
For I will stop at nothing to get back to you again.

The author's comments:
This is how I think you should ask for the first steps of redemption if your allowed to have it from your other.

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on Sep. 2 2013 at 6:15 pm
dancingintheflames GOLD, Kirksville, Missouri
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She stood in the storm and when the wind didn't blow her away, she adjusted her sails<3

I love the part where you say you the noose and i the hope, its  so powerful. Thanks!

BlottedInk said...
on Aug. 16 2013 at 12:54 pm
BlottedInk, Searsmont, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
"The most wasted day of all is that on which we have not laughed." -Nicholas Chamfort

very awesomely amazing... :)

fake_smile said...
on Aug. 16 2013 at 12:50 pm
Wow this is really beautiful :)

on Aug. 10 2013 at 7:08 pm
SoulPoetry PLATINUM, Sierra Madre, California
29 articles 4 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I will work harder" (animal farm boxer the horse)

AMAZING!! i'm blown away by the language

sarah98 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 30 2013 at 10:07 pm
sarah98 BRONZE, Holyoke, Massachusetts
1 article 0 photos 405 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to write for yourself and have no audience than write for your audience and have no self.

the picture you paint of this person is amazing. i feel like i know you, him/her, and your story. fantastic job

on Jul. 25 2013 at 6:50 pm
BlackRosetears BRONZE, Spokane, Washington
4 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never Give In"

Oh my gosh sooo good this is amazing  

on Jun. 10 2013 at 7:30 pm
Kaylaa_Nicole_ SILVER, Smyrna, Tennessee
6 articles 0 photos 28 comments
This is strong stuff, real passion. nice tone. thanks :)

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Jun. 6 2013 at 4:49 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 631 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

:O I AM TOTALLY SPEECHLESS! this is like prose poetry, and I absolutely lovee EVERYTHING about it! Great job!!

on Jun. 5 2013 at 6:10 pm
liberalartist GOLD, Stillwater, Minnesota
14 articles 2 photos 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
Poeta nasicur, non fit. (a poet is born, not made)

well written awesomeness  

on May. 23 2013 at 4:02 pm
TanviKusum DIAMOND, Gurgaon, Other
89 articles 4 photos 197 comments

Favorite Quote:
All men who have achieved great things have been great dreamers.
Orison Swett Marden

"The role of a writer is not to say what we all can say, but what we are unable to say." - Anais Nin

we speak in hushed voices so as to not wake our memories

This was really well written! Great Job!

on May. 22 2013 at 3:56 pm
gossamergirl GOLD, Nowhere, New Hampshire
15 articles 1 photo 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The greatest thing you'll ever learn is just to love and be loved in return." ~ Moulin Rouge

Wow. that was really deep. I love the message and i agree, that is an awesome way to ask for redemption