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The Unknown

May 23, 2013
By RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner


Everything is so bright
And vivid
Outside of these grey,
Drab walls.
There's something there,
I can feel it,
Lying right in my gaze
And yet I can't see it.

I long for the day when
I'll have the means to see again,
To see the things that a
Person can only see alone.
It's not just being independent,
It's the life of it all,
Really living with your heart
Pumping and everything else
Pumping in sync.

The air is sweeter outside
These four walls,
Even this whole town,
There's something in the distance.

The sunlight is golden,
Dripping in complications,
A stream of energy that you can
Hold in your hand.

I want to hear
The music of my own,
Not the melodies of another.
I want to think with
Clear dictation and direction
And not worry about the
Consequences.

I want to do all the
Cliche' things with a smile,
Not a grin.
Grins are for the ill at heart,
The ones that feel no glee
Or joy,
Just the need to smile
And yet a grin lie bare on your
Face.

Maybe I'm wishing for too much,
Exalting in the dreams of a fool.
I'll calm down for a few
More years
But I'm afraid it's too late,
The bug is eating at my soul.
This bug yearns for more
Than I can give or take,
Feels every blow more clearly
And precisely.
It affects everyone sooner
Or later
But it has taken to me
Unfortunately.
The bug hates smiles,
The bug loves grins.
The bug wants no one to win.

If life must go on
Without me,
Why can everyone else be free?



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on Jan. 31 2014 at 4:51 pm
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Thank you so much!

Alycia. BRONZE said...
on Jan. 26 2014 at 9:44 pm
Alycia. BRONZE, Lower Gwynedd, Pennsylvania
4 articles 8 photos 41 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Our lives are not our own. We are bound to others, past and present, and by each crime and every kindness, we birth our future.” -- David Mitchell, Cloud Atlas

So lonely yet beautiful. Great job!

on Jan. 12 2014 at 6:36 am
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Thank you so much!

on Jan. 11 2014 at 11:42 pm
Metalhead36 SILVER, Amherst, Massachusetts
8 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words have no power to impress the mind without the exquisite horror of their reality. - Edgar Allan Poe

Beautifully descriptive, beautifully flowing, beautiful imagery, overall, honestly.....beautiful.

on Jan. 11 2014 at 6:34 pm
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Thank you! Also, thank you for the constructive criticism! I'll work on the setting when I edit it!

on Jan. 11 2014 at 5:27 pm
EmmaClaire0823 GOLD, Bay Minette, Alabama
13 articles 0 photos 102 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you wish to see in the world."

I thought this was incredibly good and well written. All I have to say is that I think you should have given it more of a setting. I got a little lost in the location of the poem if that makes sense. Really great job though. 

on Jun. 14 2013 at 6:05 pm
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Thank you so much!!

mnm08 BRONZE said...
on Jun. 8 2013 at 8:53 pm
mnm08 BRONZE, Grande Prairie, Texas
2 articles 0 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A writer needs the industry of an ant, the creativity of a kitten and the hid of an armadillo."- Author Unknown

Wow, that was really insightful and definitely deep. Great job :) 

on Jun. 5 2013 at 1:08 pm
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Thank you!! I love getting comments like these!!

on Jun. 4 2013 at 8:05 pm
Jeeves12345 GOLD, Santa Maria, California
13 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's okay, I won't judge.

This poem was deep. I understood every word and I feel it all the way with you. Keep it up!

on Jun. 3 2013 at 2:26 pm
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Thank you so much!! That means a lot, to hear from someone that I was able to let emotions flow along the words! Thank you so much!!

bree_bree GOLD said...
on Jun. 3 2013 at 12:20 pm
bree_bree GOLD, Auburn, Kentucky
12 articles 0 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
mistakes are made to be learned from.

This peice was an emotional rolercoaster it seams, i wanted to jump up and go do something worth while and then i felt compleatly crashed like i couldnt do anything and that it just wasnt worth it. You have a verry effective poem here i really comend you on your work.

on Jun. 2 2013 at 10:28 am
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Thank you so much!

on Jun. 1 2013 at 4:16 pm
BorderlineGenius777 SILVER, Lewiston, Idaho
7 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If all our misfortunes were laid in one common heap, whence everyone must take an equal portion, most would be content to take their own and depart."- Socrates

Hm. I think that this is something everyone feels at one point or another, and you voiced it perfectly. I love it.

on May. 30 2013 at 11:44 pm
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Thank you so much!! Your comment was so indepth and I love that! Also, I'd rather not let you lose that line because of keeping it true to myself but I am so happy that you asked and didn't just use it! Thank you!

on May. 30 2013 at 11:31 pm
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Thank you so much!!! I haven't seen you much around in the forums or really anywhere. I think that I'm going to go check out some of your stuff! Thank you again, I love the term beautifully tragic!

on May. 30 2013 at 10:45 pm
candlelightwriter GOLD, Kirksville, Missouri
16 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Secretly we're all a little more absurd than we make ourselves out to be"-- J.K. Rowling.

Wow. This was beautifully tragic. You portrayed the emotion so well. I know the feeling which you speak. I love how you call it "a bug" and I love your whole bit about grins vs. smiles. There are far too many grins in this world, but yet the bug, and our own insecurities sometimes demand grins from us no matter how much we'd wish for a true smile. This was a fantastic poem. :)

on May. 29 2013 at 5:47 pm
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Thank you!

sarah98 BRONZE said...
on May. 29 2013 at 4:45 pm
sarah98 BRONZE, Holyoke, Massachusetts
1 article 0 photos 405 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to write for yourself and have no audience than write for your audience and have no self.

wow this is amazing. It flows and the your description is great

on May. 28 2013 at 8:51 pm
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Thank you! You guys make my day!!