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Grace

May 30, 2013
By liberalartist GOLD, Stillwater, Minnesota
liberalartist GOLD, Stillwater, Minnesota
14 articles 2 photos 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
Poeta nasicur, non fit. (a poet is born, not made)


Grace
the houses of Hutchinson
are desolate and without hope
as we drive across the cold plains. She and I.
She is cold. I give her my jacket,
revealing the bandages on my arms.
she doesn’t question, just thanks me for the jacket.
she asks if I’m cold and I reply that her presence
heats the entire bus.She doesn’t believe me.

She is frozen out on the plains. The cold, desolate plains.
She edges closer to me, trying to share my body heat.
I don’t mind. I embrace her, her ivory skin
ice to my hands. the rain starts, and I give her
my umbrella. After all, she needs it more than I do.
We board the school bus. The bandages on my arms peel off,
revealing the red lines that are my secret.
She sees the truth. She is not angry.
She reaches around me, and we embrace.
This time it’s not her who needs it most.



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on May. 4 2015 at 10:18 pm
Ray--yo PLATINUM, Kathmandu, Other
43 articles 2 photos 581 comments

Favorite Quote:
God Makes No Mistakes. (Gaga?)
"I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right." -Liesel Meminger via Markus Zusac, "The Book Thief"

I like how this seems to be taken off from the middle of a story, which gives it a sense of mystery, yet your poem is somehow complete. Great job!

on Sep. 24 2013 at 9:34 pm
Shade3043 DIAMOND, Shade3043 Did This, In Case Of Anonymous, Other
87 articles 0 photos 168 comments

Favorite Quote:
When I was a boy, I would always hear scary things in the news and my mother would say to me, "Always look for the helpers. Everywhere you look you will always find people helping." - Fred Rogers

I like it, ut it just sorta tells you what happens.... 3/5

on Jun. 10 2013 at 6:19 pm
bethanyebethany BRONZE, Clinton, Tennessee
2 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I would love to be made perfect, but instead, I have the grace of God." -Audio Adrenaline

Absolutely brilliant.

on Jun. 5 2013 at 10:11 pm
liberalartist GOLD, Stillwater, Minnesota
14 articles 2 photos 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
Poeta nasicur, non fit. (a poet is born, not made)

it is a story, a (mostly) true one as well.

on Jun. 5 2013 at 6:12 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 433 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

Its more like a story and its amazing, i'm crying a little bit way to go keep it up. brilliant

on Jun. 4 2013 at 7:06 pm
liberalartist GOLD, Stillwater, Minnesota
14 articles 2 photos 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
Poeta nasicur, non fit. (a poet is born, not made)

thank you  

on Jun. 4 2013 at 7:04 pm
Firefaerie SILVER, Austin, Texas
6 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not pity the dead. pity the living, and above all, those who live without love" - J.K Rowling
"There's always another secret" -Brandon Sanderson

imma cry, nuff said

on Jun. 4 2013 at 6:44 pm
LittleLadybird GOLD, Carrickfergus, Other
14 articles 0 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
To be nobody but yourself in a world that is trying it's hardest every night and day to change you into everyone else is to fight the hardest battle a human being can fight, and never stop fighting.

I really like the story this poem tells, and the last line is just amazing and has a really strong impact!

on Jun. 4 2013 at 8:22 am
liberalartist GOLD, Stillwater, Minnesota
14 articles 2 photos 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
Poeta nasicur, non fit. (a poet is born, not made)

thanks. finally someone told me what it needed to improve.

Zach_M said...
on Jun. 3 2013 at 6:22 pm
liberalartist.. I read this and it flowed wonderfully, but you should have used more metaphors and similes; detail your work as if it's going to be the last pieve you ever write. This piece could have really stood out if you would have expressed more feeling into it, instead of describing what is happening, but you did a great job needless to say.

on May. 31 2013 at 7:28 pm
liberalartist GOLD, Stillwater, Minnesota
14 articles 2 photos 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
Poeta nasicur, non fit. (a poet is born, not made)

thank you guys. i am always open to feedback and criticism so i can improve

on May. 31 2013 at 12:39 pm
TargonTheDragon GOLD, Ofallon, Missouri
15 articles 16 photos 292 comments

Favorite Quote:
First dentistry was painless.
Then bicycles were chainless,
Carriages were horseless,
And many laws enforceless.

Next cookery was fireless,
Telegraphy was wireless,
Cigars were nicotineless,
And coffee caffeineless.

Soon oranges were seedless,
The putting green was weedless,
The college boy was hatless,
The proper diet fatless.

New motor roads are dustless,
The latest steel is rustless,
Our tennis courts are sodless,
Our new religion — godless.

yup, this is definetly good. very expressive, im so impressed on how well it flowed (in my opinion:P)

on May. 30 2013 at 6:10 pm
lastingbreath16 DIAMOND, Lake Alfred, Florida
54 articles 3 photos 70 comments

Favorite Quote:
screw it all if life gives u lemons do what ever you feel the need to do with them.

I WOVE IT U R RLY GOOD

on May. 30 2013 at 6:09 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1159 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

i definitely think this has an element of hope in their. you're hope for each other :D whoever said it wasn't optimistic enough just needs a dose of realism. this is awesome, keep it up!