Okay, so, I'm bad with poetry to begin with. Haha. Do you think you could put that this poem was about your father some where towards the begining? I left you five stars :)

Thank you loads for that, taking your time out and all.. Yes, I'm considering revising those two lines that make my breathing dad sound like he's dead!! hehe. He hasn't blown apart yet. And the title...well I didn't even plan to write the poem on my dad at first, I said started writing about the 'smile' of a 'you' and I didn't know who to stick 'you' up with...so I just made it my dad, adn labelled the thing as an inspiration. But you got valuable thought provoking points, I'll probably revise those lines a bit. Thanks superherofan!

Awwww! That's so sweet!
Okay. Back to business. You asked on the forums to get 'frank feedback'. First, I have to ask why you named your poem 'Inspiration'. I know you mentioned it in the last sentence, but I couldn't see it fitting in anywhere else. I kind of thought the title should incorporate smiling, but that's just my opinion.
Second, I was kind of confused by: '...Not the tides that had suffocated your strength, Not the ache that blew you apart from within, has caused your smile to shrink'. Did he die? That was the only part I got stuck on though.
Hope this helps!