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Gravity of the Sea

June 21, 2013
By Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 631 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

I know I attempt to evade the ocean of life,
Cowering at the thought
Of being encased in its arctic waters.
I dive frantically under the currents
Of churning waves,
Foam obscuring my vision
And salt imbedding itself
Into my bitter thoughts.

Sometimes I surface,
But when I don’t,
My lungs burst without the familiarity of air,
And I am weak with deteriorating confidence.
However, wisdom is my weapon,
Defined by the thick border
Of how an individual uses
His given knowledge.

I know more waves await me
As life rolls along with the seas,
And I hope I’ll learn to face those
Head first,
When the tides of life change
Along with the pull
Of my future.

The author's comments:
I believe this piece describes how we as people tend to escape the difficult turmoil of life and choose what is easiest for us, rather then what is right and what will aid us in the future. So, I wrote this poem to demonstrate how I hope to succeed in the future by working my hardest. Also, I wanted to try a whole different style of writing. Hope you like it!

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on Jul. 27 2013 at 8:07 am
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

I really liked this one your an incredible writer hanna. I liked this poem becuase it is though provoking and your word choice was out of this world. I loved how it was basically how we as people take the easy way out instead of the hard way and trying to work hard to be a success it was amazing with your ocena theme along with it. i really enjoyed it 5/5 stars for sure! :3

bree_bree GOLD said...
on Jul. 15 2013 at 11:41 pm
bree_bree GOLD, Auburn, Kentucky
12 articles 0 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
mistakes are made to be learned from.

It was verry thought provoking and i think that it was great :D your metaphore is verry well aligned. i enjoyed reading this peice verry much.

on Jul. 8 2013 at 7:14 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
38 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

I love the metaphor of the ocean and everything. this is really good! the symblosism is all there. great job! keep rockin :)

Haden_Stein said...
on Jul. 1 2013 at 6:30 pm
Haden_Stein, Goshen, Indiana
0 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
stopping the violence in the most tactical and intelligent way possible... MORE VIOLENCE!!!!

very nice symbolism and expression....i dont read much poetry so i cant make constructive criticism, but i liked it XD