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The subconscious

July 18, 2013
By write118118 SILVER, London, Other
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'beginning today, treat everyone you meet as if they will be dead by midnight' Og Mandino

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The light hours are to be savoured
For the subconscious lies in slumber
Undisturbed, quiet and cool
It remains behind a locked door
Stored together with your unwanted thoughts
Who thrash through the bars of a cage without a key
Your attentive mind protects you from its damage
But when the mind is at rest
The subconscious escapes
To play with your sanity

As the mind becomes vulnerable in sleep
It transforms into a darkened haze
And slips unseen between the bars
The battle for power is won and
The subconscious takes over
It beckons to the hidden devils
Who slither between the cage bars
And dance behind your closed eyelids
The subconscious is omnipotent and
You are a captive of terror

You are not the controller anymore
You must simply endure
As twisted recollections overpower
Pleasant thoughts and peaceful dreams
You cannot wake but are trapped
At the mercy of the subconscious
Warped images and malicious thoughts
Swirl in sickening spirals
And the voices chant:
‘We are the unwanted thoughts...’

Sunlight filters through the curtain’s cracks
And the subconscious scarpers
Back to its cage of darkness
The sheets are twisted and your
Heart beats against your ribcage
You try to trap the subconscious
But it cannot be grasped and remains
Lurking amidst the shadows of your mind
But at night the subconscious returns
To play with your sanity

© Cassie H., Carmi, IL

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Mckay ELITE said...
on Jul. 30 2013 at 4:00 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

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No worries. Happens to all of us. 
write118118 SILVER said...
on Jul. 30 2013 at 2:35 am
write118118 SILVER, London, Other
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&#039;beginning today, treat everyone you meet as if they will be dead by midnight&#039; Og Mandino

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The subconscious was meant to be capatalised woops! Thank you so much! xxx
Mckay ELITE said...
on Jul. 29 2013 at 6:17 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

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Ok, like laceandcoffe, I'm envoius that you're from London. I love their accents. On to the poem. Very deep. I felt like this wasn't writting by a teenager but rather by someone with experience who's been doing this for eons. the vocabulary is superb, unlike most that I've read lately. I love how you explain the subconscious. The manner in which you explain it is like a professor but with vivid imagery. Very fun to imagine it. And that first line "The light hours are to be savoured" is captivating. Start to finish, you didn't disappoint but continue to impress me. (One minor detail: the word "subconscious", I'm not sure if it's becuase you intended it to be that way or not, but it should be captialized. Unless it was your choice to do so.) Other than that, I'm marveled. Continue to write. 
write118118 SILVER said...
on Jul. 27 2013 at 2:55 am
write118118 SILVER, London, Other
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Favorite Quote:
&#039;beginning today, treat everyone you meet as if they will be dead by midnight&#039; Og Mandino

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Thank you so much! haha! I want to live in america- wanna swap? ;) xxxxx
laceandcoffee PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 26 2013 at 9:54 pm
laceandcoffee PLATINUM, Rio Rancho, New Mexico
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&quot;We make up horrors to help us escape from the real ones.&quot;- Stephen King<br /> &quot;But I don&#039;t want comfort. I want God, I want poetry. I want danger, I want freedom, I want goodness. I want sin.&quot;- Aldous Huxley

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This is so beautiful and so relatable. I really loved it! By the way I'm so jealous your from London. I've always wanted to live there!
write118118 SILVER said...
on Jul. 24 2013 at 6:22 am
write118118 SILVER, London, Other
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Favorite Quote:
&#039;beginning today, treat everyone you meet as if they will be dead by midnight&#039; Og Mandino

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Thank you so much! That really boosted my confidence. This was my first peice of work so i was not sure how it would go down but I am glad you enjoyed it! xxx
LexusMarie PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 23 2013 at 8:49 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
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The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

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Hello! I don't think I've seen you on the site before, so it's nice to meet you! My, I wish we'd met sooner because this poem was HIGHLY impressive! I am at a loss of words, I was completely captivated the whole time while reading this and I told myself, this poem can't get better and each stanza was all the more wonderful than the last. The title is completely alluring and everything went really well together. While reading I was absolutely fascinated and I was so pleased with your descriptions of the subconscious, as it can be so mysterious and is really difficult to describe. I loved the repetition of 'play with your sanity' it really brought the poem together and took the poem to a whole nother level. Your use of vocabulary is also impressive and brings a feeling to the poem that's indescribable. I can't tell you how much I enjoyed this poem, but I can tell you that you are an exceptional writer and when you post more I would love to read what you post. Bravo! Bravo! Bravo! Bravo!