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Surrender

August 6, 2013
By StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro


Surrender now your bottles
Broken only at their lips
Resort to sobered monotone
To let me know your mouth is shattered, too



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on Aug. 14 2013 at 4:43 pm
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro

I can understand why you would think that, and you may well be right. Thanks for the feedback! :)

OldYoungOne said...
on Aug. 12 2013 at 12:51 pm
I agree that this poem in particular did not meet up to the theme you have just discribed.

on Aug. 9 2013 at 5:41 pm
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro

First off, thank you so much for taking the time to read this and offer your opinion on it. :) I can understand how the poem might come across as vague, and perhaps a different title would help with that. Mainly, I was trying to convey the complicated nature of alcoholics, and how it sometimes seems as if they are more 'themselves' when they are drunk. However, I may not have been successful in doing so. :P

midnightwoah said...
on Aug. 9 2013 at 12:20 pm
midnightwoah, Monett, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"We accept the love we think we deserve." -Stephen Chbosky

Does this convers about being sober or something else. Perfect picture but I would have named it "Surrender Your broken bottles"