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i am your fragment/you are my run-on MAG

September 5, 2013
By Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2230 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou


i am your fragment
an unfinished thought
begun but unexplored
a fresh new idea
but that is all i am
the start of something new
an uncultured whimsy
with no end
an alpha with no omega

you are my run-on
your story never ends
inconstant and indifferent
moving rapidly from
one thought to the next
never bothered by the
disjointed fragments
you leave behind
you have your
ands buts ors nors fors yets
to excuse yourself

you make it seem like
we will unify to create
a clear sentence
eventually a coherent thought
a pulsing one
you stretch my premature limbs
to make me fit
into your story
but i am incomplete
and you move on
while i crawl to you

i was never
a part of you
i'd never complete you
and you'd never be
the happy ending
to my miserable beginning


The author's comments:
I'm a grammar nerd. I friggin (that's not grammatically correct but bear with me) love English. Therefore, I was inspired to write this poem. Plus, a ton of other emotions. I wrote it a long time ago. But I was too damn lazy to submit it. According to the WritingCenter, "a sentence fragment is an incomplete sentence." And according to Wikipdedia, "a run-on is a sentence in which two or more independent clauses (i.e., complete sentences) are joined without appropriate punctuation or conjunction." (A run-on just continues from one thought to the next without a pause.)By the way the line, "and's but's..." are conjunctions.

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on Dec. 6 2015 at 8:45 pm
haley101 DIAMOND, Windsor, Connecticut
70 articles 5 photos 195 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;Someone I loved once gave me a box full of darkness. It took me years to understand that this too, was a gift.&rdquo;<br /> <br /> ― Mary Oliver

could you check out my work mckay? I'm interested in your thoughts because of your writing.

on Feb. 16 2015 at 3:20 pm
Allen. PLATINUM, Palo Alto, California
32 articles 9 photos 525 comments

Favorite Quote:
[i]No matter how much people try to put you down or make you think other things about yourself, the only person you can trust about who you really are is you[/i] -Crusher-P

You're very welcome. Thank you for commenting on my work as well :3

Mckay ELITE said...
on Feb. 15 2015 at 8:06 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2230 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

I hadn't thought about it that way. Now, I got it as well.... :) Thanks for reading, commenting, and enlightening me. ^u^

on Feb. 15 2015 at 12:07 am
Allen. PLATINUM, Palo Alto, California
32 articles 9 photos 525 comments

Favorite Quote:
[i]No matter how much people try to put you down or make you think other things about yourself, the only person you can trust about who you really are is you[/i] -Crusher-P

Very well written, very smart, and felt like rather an inside joke meant to make grammar nerds feel emotion. Needless to say, I got it.

Mckay ELITE said...
on Aug. 16 2014 at 9:26 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2230 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

thanks. belated thank u.

Mckay ELITE said...
on Jul. 27 2014 at 8:09 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2230 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

I'm honored with your words. I'm enraptured that this little piece of me is a pleasure for people to read, even though I made it when I was feeling awful. Good things often do come from bad things. Thank you! I will continue to write as long as my fickle Muse remains active. 

on Jul. 27 2014 at 2:19 am
nithyaswaminathan BRONZE, Pleasanton, California
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this poem is perfection. it's just brimming with emotion, and i totally just got lost in the lines and started living an experience rather than just reading a poem. 6/5 stars. keep writing you have a gift.

on Jul. 14 2014 at 2:41 pm
Carpe-Caffeam GOLD, No Where, Florida
10 articles 0 photos 444 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;If it weren&rsquo;t for the coffee, I&rsquo;d have no identifiable personality whatsoever.&rdquo; &ndash;David Letterman

Whoa, this made the magazine without me noticing that? Gosh, I've missed so much. T.T A belated congratulations to you, my friend!

Mckay ELITE said...
on Jul. 4 2014 at 4:32 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2230 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

I'm so honored right now by your comment that I can't believe it. So honored truly. Thank you for reading. 

Mckay ELITE said...
on Jul. 4 2014 at 4:31 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2230 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

I'm happy too. Thank you, Brisa!

Mckay ELITE said...
on Jul. 4 2014 at 4:31 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2230 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

Belated thanks, pimp. 

on Jun. 24 2014 at 11:42 am
HeatherOlivia GOLD, Solothurn, Other
16 articles 0 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;All things truly wicked start from innocence.&quot; - Ernest Hemingway

This left me speechless. (total oxymoron because I have so much to say) Everything about this is amazing, I absolutely love it. One of my favourite poems ever; right up there with Yeats and Silverstein and Poe and Frost and Cummings. "You stretch my permature limbs / to make me fit / into your story." I'm quoting you now because that line is perfect.  This poem is perfect.

Brisa PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 22 2014 at 6:07 am
Brisa PLATINUM, Wasilla, Alaska
20 articles 7 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Si dan a t&uacute; papel alineado, escribas el otro camino.&quot;<br /> &quot;If they give you lined paper, write the other way&quot;<br /> -Juan Ramon Jiminez

I'm so glad this made it to the magazine, man. Great job :) it's deep and very clever

on Nov. 18 2013 at 1:25 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1159 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;If you&#039;re losing your soul and you know it, then you&#039;ve still got a soul left to lose&rdquo; <br /> ― Charles Bukowski

This is really unique and creative. I love everything about this XD

Mckay ELITE said...
on Nov. 13 2013 at 10:10 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2230 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

Then, please, please, please, read more for more of that love. Thank you so so so much. Truly appreciate it. 

Mckay ELITE said...
on Nov. 13 2013 at 10:09 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2230 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

Thank you!! I feel honored. 

on Nov. 13 2013 at 7:00 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
72 articles 0 photos 860 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Never fear shadows. They simply mean there&#039;s a light shining somewhere nearby.&quot; - Unknown

Everytime I read your work I just love your writing even more. That's all I can say about this. Really good job.

on Nov. 5 2013 at 9:56 am
mynameisnothabib GOLD, Quinlan, Texas
10 articles 5 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;One idea lights a thousand candles&quot;<br /> ~Ralph Waldo Emerson

This is so good! I absolutely love your writing!

Mckay ELITE said...
on Oct. 31 2013 at 1:35 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2230 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

HAHAHAHA. There are plenty of poems I wish were mine but belong to other far more talented writers. Nice to know someone feels that way about this poem. Thanks so much. You've made my day. :)

on Oct. 30 2013 at 6:04 pm
TheMaskedPoet SILVER, Temple, Georgia
9 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I wish I could be a little less dramatic, like a Kennedy when Camelot went down in Flames.&quot; -Miranda Lambert

You never cease to amaze me and this work is amazing. As a fellow grammar nerd, I love this and wish it was my poem, haha! Great job!!!