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A Bird in the Fog

December 5, 2013
By .king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
.king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
9 articles 4 photos 569 comments

Favorite Quote:
( ͡~ ͜ʖ ͡°)

Perched upon a tree,
feathers spread across her breast,
she sings in undertone.
I could never get a taste
of her fainted words,
but when her song did halt,
stolen by the morning mist,
there was
not a feather left.

The author's comments:
Loved ones will soon disappear like a mysterious bird on a foggy morning. (Just my opinion)

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on Feb. 15 2015 at 12:47 am
Allen. PLATINUM, Palo Alto, California
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Favorite Quote:
[i]No matter how much people try to put you down or make you think other things about yourself, the only person you can trust about who you really are is you[/i] -Crusher-P

The best kind of poetry, in my opinion, is the kind that takes a simple moment in time and makes it inspiring. You have done that here. *takes off cat ears in respect*

on Feb. 6 2015 at 12:54 pm
ZoeMalik SILVER, London, Other
6 articles 1 photo 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don’t just get started. Keep going.

REALLY GOOD keep it up i enjoyed reading this

.king. SILVER said...
on Oct. 30 2014 at 1:11 am
.king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
9 articles 4 photos 569 comments

Favorite Quote:
( ͡~ ͜ʖ ͡°)

I'm touched by this comment, thanks! :D

on Jun. 12 2014 at 1:32 am
Z.V.Oksana PLATINUM, Harrison, Arkansas
22 articles 1 photo 60 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Maybe you can afford to wait. Maybe for you there's a tomorrow. Maybe for you there's one thousand tomorrows, or three thousand, or ten, so much time you can bathe in it, roll around it, let it slide like coins through you fingers. So much time you can waste it.
But for some of us there's only today. And the truth is, you never really know.”
― Lauren Oliver, Before I Fall

Wow...The last line left a strong emotional impact. This is wonderful, absolutely beautiful, yet short and simple. Great job!

on May. 5 2014 at 2:03 pm
VartikaSingh GOLD, Ghaziabad, Other
13 articles 1 photo 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
One who make success without any trouble is victory, but one who make a success with lots of trouble is History.

Really nice. Can u come on g-mail.

on Apr. 30 2014 at 2:56 pm
sillywabbit BRONZE, Federal Way, Washington
2 articles 3 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
Where there is love there is life.
Mahatma Gandhi

I really liked this

HammadWaseem said...
on Mar. 8 2014 at 2:07 pm
HammadWaseem, Lahore, Other
0 articles 5 photos 283 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be proud of who you are.

You can't see me
-John Cena

Ooh, somebody stop me!

WOW!!! I love it! ............. keep it up

on Mar. 3 2014 at 2:43 pm
Shadow_Wolf GOLD, Mayfield Heigts, Ohio
10 articles 0 photos 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is not opening your eyes but opening your heart."
"You see not with your eyes, But with your heart."
"Think first with your heart not your head."
"If it has a heart, It is human."

So beauful.... sooo  speechless

on Feb. 24 2014 at 7:54 am
skydancer666 GOLD, West Babylon, New York
10 articles 0 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
on my own i am clumsy ..... but on your shoulders i am free to be me

this is very good :) keep up the good work

on Feb. 23 2014 at 8:59 am
TanviKusum DIAMOND, Gurgaon, Other
89 articles 4 photos 197 comments

Favorite Quote:
All men who have achieved great things have been great dreamers.
Orison Swett Marden

"The role of a writer is not to say what we all can say, but what we are unable to say." - Anais Nin

we speak in hushed voices so as to not wake our memories

Absolutelyyyy wonderfullll :D

on Feb. 19 2014 at 1:47 am
compassion GOLD, Nowhere, Other
12 articles 17 photos 153 comments

Favorite Quote:
Expect to have hope rekindled,expect your prayers to be answered in wondrous ways! The dry seasons in life do not last,the spring rains will come again.

The beauty of this poem is undescribable for me. Its so short, but it captured the gist  so very delicately and precisely with a fascinating imagery. Love it! Definitely one the most beautiful poems.

on Jan. 31 2014 at 10:51 am
buttercup102903 BRONZE, Bellevue, Ohio
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i really like it.keep up the good work

Kindle GOLD said...
on Jan. 31 2014 at 10:49 am
Kindle GOLD, Sudbury, Other
11 articles 0 photos 93 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There is no subject so old that something new cannot be said about it." -Fyodor Dostoevsky

"Forgive me my nonsense, as I also forgive the nonsense of those that think they talk sense." - Robert Frost

I love the imagery of this poem!

on Jan. 22 2014 at 1:24 am
MyAttempt BRONZE, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
1 article 0 photos 8 comments
Very nice poem I like how it's a complete thought and you wrapped it up on the last stanza. :D 

ruth_w GOLD said...
on Jan. 20 2014 at 3:24 pm
ruth_w GOLD, Solihull, Other
12 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Common sense is the collection of prejudices acquired by age eighteen." Albert Einstein

this is beautiful

on Jan. 20 2014 at 3:23 pm
MissyStokes BRONZE, VIENNA, Virginia
4 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
Fear is like happiness but the smile is wider

This is a really great poem

Lanimal SILVER said...
on Jan. 13 2014 at 1:27 am
Lanimal SILVER, Thornton, Colorado
7 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It is not the mountain we conquer, but ourselves."
-Edmund Hillary

This is fantastic! Short poems always seem to convey the most meaning. Great job!! :)

on Jan. 12 2014 at 1:18 pm
EmmaClaire0823 GOLD, Bay Minette, Alabama
13 articles 0 photos 102 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you wish to see in the world."

I really love how short and simple this poem was and yet it convayed so much meaning and emotion. It was great. I would say though that instead of "words" put "psalm" or another word to do with music. You said that the bird sings, so I would put a word more musical. Other than that it is great. 

on Jan. 9 2014 at 12:47 pm
booklover303 SILVER, Morgan Hill,
8 articles 5 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
"School days are the unhappiest in the whole span of human existence. They are full of dull, unintelligible tasks, new and unpleasant ordinances, with brutal violations of common sense and common decency." -Henry Louis Mencken

Nice! Short and to the point... keep it up!

on Jan. 7 2014 at 10:55 am
Chaitali SILVER, Plymouth, Minnesota
5 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
Struggle has one definition and one impact not more nor less.

Ahh..amazing! Make sure to read and comment on mine- TeenInk.com/opinion/social_issues_civics/article/606294/Success-gains-us-useless-Trophies/?page=1