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The Color Red

December 16, 2013
By EmmaClaire0823 GOLD, Bay Minette, Alabama
EmmaClaire0823 GOLD, Bay Minette, Alabama
13 articles 0 photos 102 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you wish to see in the world."


Red is the peck of love's kiss on your collar
bead of blood creeping from a graze
fever racing to your cheeks when livid
char of sun scorching your skin at the beach
crunch of your teeth piercing an apple
delicate velvet of a rose in bloom
psalm of a bird at the window
metallic taste coating your tongue once bitten
flutter of your heart when caressed
Red is your most potent emotions


The author's comments:
I was trying to describe the color red to someone blind. How did I do?

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on Sep. 26 2015 at 1:54 am
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM, Houston, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Hold fast and keep your head up high for life will pass right by you like a speeding bird if you don't acknowledge it- Charles Moorer III (me)

I have always loved red XD now I know why lol good poem, I'm not much of a critic, but I like it.

on Sep. 23 2014 at 6:05 pm
Hailey.0 BRONZE, Scappoose, Oregon
2 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never say goodbye, because saying goodbye means going away and going away means forgetting.
-Peter Pan

I thought it was amazing! But you should add just a few more descriptive words! Otherwise beautifully written and I've read some of your other stuff and your an amazing writter! Please dont stop!

on Mar. 29 2014 at 11:44 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1136 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

HEY EMMA! WOW. This. Poem. I. Just. Loved. You described the colour red ever so perfectly and I cannot say anything more then the fact that I adored all your words in this one. Also the last line was a perfect ending. And I love the colour red. AND HEY I gotta share this with my best friend, whose favourite colour is red too! ^_^

on Jan. 9 2014 at 10:03 am
EmmaClaire0823 GOLD, Bay Minette, Alabama
13 articles 0 photos 102 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you wish to see in the world."

I didn't want to put emotion into this piece, because it isn't emotional. This poem is about describing what the color red is to a blind person. Not the emotion behind the color. If I writing as if I were blind I would put emotion into it, but I didn't write it that way. And Red is the only word captialized for a reason. 

on Jan. 8 2014 at 10:52 pm
author_musical PLATINUM, Torrington, Wyoming
27 articles 0 photos 50 comments

Favorite Quote:
Sweetie, if you're going to be two faced, at least make one of them pretty. - Marilyn Monroe

This is good. It could be a little better, you couldv'e added some more emotion into it. The lack of capalitization is going to bug me, but I still enjoyed it.

on Jan. 7 2014 at 7:07 pm
BandGeekAndProud PLATINUM, Burlington, Massachusetts
23 articles 0 photos 49 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imagination is more important than knowledge."
Albert Einstein

Honestly, there isn't much I have to criticze about this poem, except I would say to use less "SAT-style" words. I know they're very descriptive, but they clutter up a poem and get between a reader and the emotions. The way I think of it is that emotions are raw and powerful and natural, and the simplest words can describe them the best. It was already a very good poem, I just think it could have been even better. By the way, I love your prompt - I may try to write a color poem of my own!

on Dec. 21 2013 at 7:22 am
carolineklepper SILVER, Tappan, New York
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Absolutely beautiful. I love the sensory details. Very descriptive.