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A Play On A Play On Words MAG

November 13, 2008
By Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
\\\\\\\"Time brings all things to life, in that I trust it so.\\\\\\\" ~ Willie Stark


When the tides change
I’ll be free
to drown among my people
in the ancient lands of nowhere
nowhere you would go
with a head upon my hat
and feet upon my shoes
it’s time to go inside
to survive
the cold of the air conditioning
in my room it’s harsh living
with the lights turned off
no one makes a sound
except the pitter patter of my soul
across the aluminum roof of my mind
like raindrops in your eye
all you are is a blurred image
thoughts once clear
are now hard to see
I have to retrieve my telescope
just to see you
still leaves me empty inside
’cause I think it’s my fault
that I have no idea
but I don’t know what to think
or where to begin
so I just sit and wait
for the tide to come in.



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on Jan. 15 2010 at 6:04 pm
DestinyMartinez PLATINUM, Boca Raton, Florida
23 articles 0 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never know that you love someone untill they're gone."

Wow, this is really good. I love the detail in this. You’re a great writer. You should really check out some of my writing I think you will like it. Our writing is similar in a way. Please comment and rate too. Thank you.

on Dec. 29 2009 at 10:12 pm
Only,I PLATINUM, Taylorville, Illinois
45 articles 17 photos 123 comments

Favorite Quote:
This too shall pass.

<3

I love this.

on Dec. 23 2009 at 1:45 am
ShakingChandeliers SILVER, N.Highlands, California
9 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A thin layer of trust had formed in my mind, like a scab."

"I preferred albums to the more modern eight tracks. Albums came with sleeves which reminded me of clean underwear."
-Augusten Burroughs

I simple. love it :)

on Dec. 7 2009 at 11:22 pm
maddie1319 BRONZE, Brea, California
1 article 7 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is short. Break the rules. Forgive quickly. Kiss slowly. Love truly. Laugh uncontrollably. Love the true God. Never regret anything that made you smile.

This is really brilliant amazing work

on Dec. 7 2009 at 3:34 pm
iloveusher BRONZE, Raytown, Missouri
1 article 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
All men should be treated eqal

I thought tis was a great poem.

on Nov. 15 2009 at 4:36 pm
EternalSunshine GOLD, High Bridge, New Jersey
14 articles 9 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Happiness is when what you think, what you say, and what you do are in harmony." - Mahatma Gandhi

I really, really like this! My favorite lines are "no one makes a sound except the pitter patter of my soul across the aluminum roof of my mind." What a beautiful poem, keep it up:)

on Nov. 15 2009 at 10:35 am
francheeze88 SILVER, Oak Park, Illinois
5 articles 6 photos 21 comments
this is amazing. the past part is from "the pitter patter of my soul" to "'cause I think its my fault"

but its all really good. really good

on Oct. 25 2009 at 12:04 am
yaelephant5 PLATINUM, Potomac, Maryland
29 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing, I think, is not apart from living. Writing is a kind of double living. The writer experiences everything twice. Once in reality and once in the mirror which waits always before or behind."

amazing, because i know im gonna have to read it again and again to understand all the nuances

SuperNancy said...
on Oct. 24 2009 at 6:08 pm
SuperNancy, Napa, California
0 articles 11 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Replace the fear of the unknown with curiosity."

this is very intrigging....

on Oct. 24 2009 at 5:22 pm
MissLeaDee SILVER, Guttenberg, Iowa
5 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'd been wondering all this time, whether there's any meaning to a failed love. Is it something that will disappear the same as something that never existed. Now I know, there is meaning..there was a meaning...right here." – Takemoto [Honey and Clover]

"no one makes a sound

except the pitter patter of my soul

across the aluminum roof of my mind"

What a lovely poem. =]

on Oct. 24 2009 at 4:26 pm
StartlingThing GOLD, Gresham, Oregon
13 articles 11 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The difference between the right word and the right word is like the difference between lightening bug and lightening" -Mark Twain

Beautiful wording. Keep writing i think the world needs more writers

on Oct. 24 2009 at 3:12 pm
liz ward BRONZE, Easton, Maryland
2 articles 0 photos 3 comments
very nice!

on Oct. 24 2009 at 1:55 pm
DEARtiffanyy GOLD, West Hills, California
12 articles 10 photos 20 comments
This is just...WOW. (:

keep it up.

on Oct. 2 2009 at 4:57 pm
lauren_b SILVER, Flower Mound, Texas
5 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love something set it free, if their meant to be with you, they'll come back"

Realy great poem. I love when i see artists coming to life.

on Oct. 2 2009 at 11:33 am
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

I like this piece. You use beautiful imagery in it. Great job!

on Sep. 30 2009 at 10:18 am
Brittuhhknee BRONZE, North Highlands, California
3 articles 2 photos 19 comments
wow this is straight genius! i've never read anything like this. the play on words is cool :) haha and i love the title. it's perfect. i wish i could write like this..

on Sep. 24 2009 at 12:41 pm
Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
\\\\\\\"Time brings all things to life, in that I trust it so.\\\\\\\" ~ Willie Stark

Oh wow... it's been awhile I'm not sure if I remember... but, most of my poetry is just like one thought that I take and spin it around in my head until it comes out poetic... haha

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on Aug. 22 2009 at 10:10 pm
qwerty42 GOLD, Waverly, Kentucky
13 articles 10 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do or do not, there is no try. -Yoda

that is beautiful, where did the ispiration come from?

on Mar. 28 2009 at 9:32 pm
I liked it the first time i read it. I loved it the second time. Thank you for posting it where I can read it. I could never post my stuff I am to shy. I really enjoyed reading it. Please keep writing and sharing

lostinbooks said...
on Mar. 16 2009 at 3:58 am
Beautiful. I think I often think like that, with similies. It really captures the feeling. A bit confusing on the first read, but after that, it is just and excellent work.