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On Trail to the Trial MAG

November 23, 2008
By JoyousLife BRONZE, Brooklyn, New York
JoyousLife BRONZE, Brooklyn, New York
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The Earth has not stopped swinging;
when did it die?
Like a man hanged
orbits his rope,
we follow the sun.

Death waits distantly
carrion crows cry the end
dark’s car lights
chase down the world
to burn it.

A child crying out in pain
a race car speeding toward fame
a grown man blushing red in shame –
which is the world?

Cold gears released to grind slowly
their heated way to oblivion.
Combustion in a flash of white heat.
What matters when all ceases:
who’ll clear the debris, the pieces?

Vultures hover on the horizon
somnolent in their certainty
watching with cold and cruel eyes
as we prey scuttle fervently
to an unavoidable end.

A twisted, weighted, rigged game,
A rutted one-way dead-end lane,
A fogged, dirty, opaque pane –
Which is the world?



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rayj095 GOLD said...
on Apr. 6 2010 at 8:50 pm
rayj095 GOLD, Gadsden, Alabama
19 articles 6 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And if we're lucky, we realize, in the face of everything, in the face of life, the true dream is being able
to dream at all." -Grey's Anatomy

Amazing. I love your descriptive words.

Jaquie BRONZE said...
on Mar. 20 2010 at 2:54 pm
Jaquie BRONZE, West Palm Beach, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
This is certainly one of my favorites: "I will become even more undignified than this, and I will be humiliated in my own eyes." -2 Samuel 6:22

Incredible. This is a work of art. Amazing, amazing job! God bless.

on Mar. 15 2010 at 10:06 am
I think your poem is really awsome

on Feb. 21 2010 at 8:24 pm
sunnyhunny PLATINUM, Litchfield, New Hampshire
22 articles 3 photos 329 comments

Favorite Quote:
"An eye for an eye makes the whole world blind."
-Ghandi

Well I think its really good.

on Jan. 30 2010 at 9:00 pm
abeatlesfan65 GOLD, Stillwater, Minnesota
19 articles 0 photos 55 comments

Favorite Quote:
"My greatest trouble is getting the curtain up and down." - T.S. Eliot

Very well written! I'm glad you decided to publish this, you're talented!

on Nov. 9 2009 at 2:45 pm
AbbotRabbit GOLD, Abolana, District Of Columbia
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Favorite Quote:
This poem has great flow and insight.
I really enjoyed it.
Lovely poem darling =]
-Please check out the works that I have posted on here it would be highly appreciated and I think you would greatly enjoy them, Thankk youz-
XxIll tell you Im an orphan after you meet myy familyXx

This poem has great flow and insight.

I really enjoyed it.

Lovely poem darling =]

-Please check out the works that I have posted on here it would be highly appreciated and I think you would greatly enjoy them, Thankk youz-

XxThe Whole Time You Were Talking I Didnt Hear A Single Word You Said B/C Th3 Whole Time You Were Talking I Was Picturing You DeadXx

on Sep. 20 2009 at 6:51 pm
Alexandria Pincheon BRONZE, Portland, Texas
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This poem left me awestruck, so wanting more. I loved it. It moved me and touched me. It was so deep, so well written and honest. I give you kuddos. You surely deserve them.

on May. 17 2009 at 10:11 pm
Twilightnme SILVER, Anchorage, Alaska
6 articles 0 photos 50 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You dont know what you have until its gone"

nice... enough. It needs work, but its good. Make it so we want more...

on May. 6 2009 at 7:25 pm
YeseniaG SILVER, Livonia, Michigan
7 articles 1 photo 122 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is what happens when you're busy making plans.

Great work. I had to comment on this. It was really good.

on May. 6 2009 at 12:04 pm
LittleBritt PLATINUM, Washington, New Jersey
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oh my god...that was amazing.



A child crying out in pain

a race car speeding toward fame

a grown man blushing red in shame –

which is the world?





that part really stuck out to me. what an awesome thought.

really good poem. keep it up

on May. 6 2009 at 12:06 am
annkaykay2011 DIAMOND, Lansing, Michigan
75 articles 11 photos 137 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am who I am, sorry, no changes."

The last stanza was....wow. It has a dark beauty to it

on May. 5 2009 at 10:17 pm
GoldenGirl PLATINUM, Vashon, Washington
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That was absolutely amazing! I think this may be the best poem I have ever read! I can't help feeling like you see something beyond...that no one else can see. And now I want to see it too. You come accross as a VERY experienced writer. Writing is definetely for you! Keep it up!

on May. 5 2009 at 9:54 pm
xXsmileXx PLATINUM, St. Louis, Missouri
34 articles 0 photos 265 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Your dreams only become intangible when you stop reaching" ~me ;)

Really good! Every word lured me further into the poem.

on May. 5 2009 at 1:07 pm
AndThisIsReal PLATINUM, Broadalbin, New York
31 articles 0 photos 81 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dans chaque fil il y a un debut.

In one word: Stunning.

This poem has such a dark intriguing beauty to it.

Reminds me of my writing.

Check it out if you have the time.

Keep writing and I'll keep reading.

You're a gifted writer.

<3, Sam.

on Mar. 17 2009 at 10:39 pm
Oh my god that poem is ssoo incredible! You're a fabulous writer and i can truly capture the depth of your unruly curiosity and passion.

on Mar. 17 2009 at 4:58 am
JoyousLife BRONZE, Brooklyn, New York
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thanks everyone! i'm really glad you enjoyed it.

on Mar. 14 2009 at 6:04 pm
phavi1995 SILVER, Sacramento, California
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POWERFUL!

on Mar. 4 2009 at 7:52 pm
kissingdawn331 SILVER, Palatine, Illinois
5 articles 0 photos 60 comments

Favorite Quote:
"when your hourglass runs out of sand you can't flip it over and start again."(changes weekly so check next weeks l8er)

you kept me in to the poem the whole time... I understand your views

on Feb. 25 2009 at 7:55 pm
brightsideofthemoon GOLD, Rochester, New York
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I could hold on to every word, every stanza. It's incredibly powerful and easy to understand once read several times. Lovely job!

futurprez said...
on Dec. 2 2008 at 3:30 am
that is an awesome poem!! very deep