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Nothing At Last

July 18, 2014
By BriannaRifkin PLATINUM, Columbia, Maryland
BriannaRifkin PLATINUM, Columbia, Maryland
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With posies in her pocket
She skips
With each jump her hair sways
And flips
Clouds of ashes coat the sky
Heavy they fall
And heavy they die
Without a care she continues
Skipping and swaying
Til she is shot down
Smiling and praying
For a better world she laughs
as the bomb bursts in her ears
her eyes cast
a glazed over glance at the giants
A blast
Comfort in the sound
Of nothing at last



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on Jul. 28 2014 at 12:32 am
BriannaRifkin PLATINUM, Columbia, Maryland
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That means a lot! Thanks!!

on Jul. 26 2014 at 9:30 am
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1486 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

Though, I've never experienced this, something in your poem made me think about my past. I keep going back to this, and reading it again and again. I know I've commented ont his before, but I have to say it again. Your poem is wonderfully written. Thanks for sharing this!

on Jul. 24 2014 at 11:38 am
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1486 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

Your poem is sad, but beautifully written. Others have told you this before, and I'm glad they have. Thank you for sharing this.

on Jul. 23 2014 at 11:17 pm
BriannaRifkin PLATINUM, Columbia, Maryland
27 articles 0 photos 12 comments
Thank you!!

on Jul. 23 2014 at 1:13 pm
Authorintraining88 GOLD, Somewhere:p, Massachusetts
11 articles 1 photo 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
You are the universe experiencing itself

This is one of the best poems I've read in awhile... it is so well written. You are extremley talented. Loved it!

on Jul. 22 2014 at 7:31 pm
___averylynn_____ SILVER, Waterford, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Look closely at the present you are constructing. It should look like the future you are dreaming. - Alice Walker.
What you wear is your billboard. So, what are you advertising?

I really like this.  It just feels so real to the place we live in today.  

on Jul. 22 2014 at 7:12 pm
AllSoPlayfulWhenYouDemonize BRONZE, Richmond, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"Our passion is our strength."
-Billie Joe Armstrong

LOVED this!

on Jul. 22 2014 at 5:34 pm
TheComet PLATINUM, Mostaganem, Other
22 articles 1 photo 439 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Speak when you are angry and you will make the best speech you will ever regret" -Ambrose Bierce
" Be yourself! Everybody else is already taken ;)"
"Don't go where the path leads you. Go instead where there's no path and leave a trail ;)"-R.W.Emerson

WoW that is so beautifully written!! You know what? I was just thinking about writing a poem in this subject and here you come ^_^ You inspired me

on Jul. 22 2014 at 4:32 pm
CreativeFreakkk DIAMOND, Spencer, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
Stand up for what you believe in even if it means standing alone. -Andy Biersack
Sometimes you gotta fall before you can fly. -Kellin Quinn
You made me hate my own reflection. -Sleeping With Sirens

This was amazing! You worded this better then most would.

on Jul. 22 2014 at 1:41 pm
BriannaRifkin PLATINUM, Columbia, Maryland
27 articles 0 photos 12 comments
It's actually about a young girl in a war zone!

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on Jul. 22 2014 at 1:02 pm
Zephyfu SILVER, Melbourne, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Mad Ones "and those who were seen dancing were thought to be insane by those who could not hear the music"

does the girl in this poem have the black plague? and she was shot?

on Jul. 21 2014 at 11:44 pm
BriannaRifkin PLATINUM, Columbia, Maryland
27 articles 0 photos 12 comments
Thank you!!

on Jul. 21 2014 at 11:39 pm
booklover303 SILVER, Morgan Hill,
8 articles 5 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
"School days are the unhappiest in the whole span of human existence. They are full of dull, unintelligible tasks, new and unpleasant ordinances, with brutal violations of common sense and common decency." -Henry Louis Mencken

wow this is really well written! the ending is suprising, which is good!