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Goodbye

July 18, 2014
By BriannaRifkin PLATINUM, Columbia, Maryland
BriannaRifkin PLATINUM, Columbia, Maryland
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I remember
As if it happened yesterday
A blood orange bulb
In a crimson sky
Hovering over miles of halcyon tides
Your hand like thread
Interwoven in mine
Goodbye.



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1299836 said...
on Jul. 25 2014 at 12:12 am
1299836, 1299836, California
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I like your use of more precise colors, like saying blood orange instead of orange. Good work!

on Jul. 22 2014 at 7:42 pm
BriannaRifkin PLATINUM, Columbia, Maryland
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Thanks!!!!

on Jul. 22 2014 at 7:25 pm
nithyaswaminathan BRONZE, Pleasanton, California
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love the "blood orange bulb" nice imagery AHHHH YOUR POETRY keep writing!!!

on Jul. 22 2014 at 4:30 pm
CreativeFreakkk DIAMOND, Spencer, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
Stand up for what you believe in even if it means standing alone. -Andy Biersack<br /> Sometimes you gotta fall before you can fly. -Kellin Quinn<br /> You made me hate my own reflection. -Sleeping With Sirens

This was worded very good but i saw a couple of grammar issues.