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Eccentric MAG
September 14, 2014
I remember it
so well – end of August,
the air still rife with heat,
the night stars, and
I felt
that I was a star
just beginning to realize
my so-called “brilliance,” and
for a moment I
believed
that life
was my thumb to bend
however far back I pleased,
maybe even breaking
a bone
if I wanted to.
© April L., Lubbock, TX
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I believe I commented on this last September - really, this is something else. I'm in a point in my life where I'm beginning to realize my potential in this world, and this poems rings true for me now more than ever. This is a stunning piece of work, it's so uplifting and inspiring and beautiful...congradulations on the publication, and thank you again for writing this. :)
CaseyChickenWang SILVER said...
on Feb. 1 2015 at 11:23 pm
Wow this is good :) Teach me how to write oh wise one!
ansem_unlimited PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 16 2014 at 9:27 pm
Very inspirational, well said, & if I may add that this is your only article on your profile (or I may be stupid/blind) & your results are astounding. Hate to break it to yah but I don't have any advice to give you that you don't alreadtly know, I'd say good luck but you're set:)
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND said...
on Nov. 16 2014 at 1:22 am
Wow. This is is simply, amazing. I absolutely, love this. I love how it is smooth, how it has rawness and emotion and how it is simple yet filled with power and beauty. You have such a talent and greatness and light in you! And you are a amazing and wonderful, talented writer. To be honest, I am proud and glad that you are getting to be published for you truly deserve it; you truly do. Congrats, my friend! Thank you so much, for sharing this! And again, congrats. :)
Angelique_h GOLD said...
on Oct. 12 2014 at 3:15 pm
Wow! This is an amazing poem and I honestly can't think of anything you could change to make it better! I think you're a very talented writer with a lot to offer!
XxSmilesxX GOLD said...
on Oct. 12 2014 at 8:57 am
I loved it. Keep up the work!
I like it very much (Oh, well it's good. :P). Rythm, message, and in particular this part
"for a moment I
believed that life
was my thumb to bend"; not only the description but how you made an intermission there so it made it all sound stronger to me while reading!
Good job! :)
"for a moment I
believed that life
was my thumb to bend"; not only the description but how you made an intermission there so it made it all sound stronger to me while reading!
Good job! :)
violawritermady BRONZE said...
on Oct. 8 2014 at 2:14 am
Love it! It's very unique - I don't think I have ever seen anything like it! I love that. You deserve that Editor's Choice 100%!!! I would love to hear what you think of either of my poems. Thanks!
Zz9PluralZAlpha said...
on Sep. 29 2014 at 11:44 pm
What a lovely, "eccentric" poem. I can tell this was what was going through your head when you made that realization. I love it when people write like that.
bruisedmemories ELITE said...
on Sep. 27 2014 at 12:22 pm
This is perfect. You truly earned that editor's choice badge. It's short and to the point and the your word choice is great. I love its unique structure and it's just overall amazing. I rated it as a 5/5!
AprilNicoleJones BRONZE said...
on Sep. 26 2014 at 2:31 pm
You guessed it right, when I say "I remember it" I'm talking about the feeling I'm describing in the poem. I can see how that would be confusing. :)
SpringRayyn PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 26 2014 at 12:29 pm
Your thumb metaphor is a good choice--it really connects to people and gives a good, though somewhat gruesome, visual. Short and to the point, I like that! The beginning though is a bit vague when you say "I remember it" I still don't know by the end of the poem what you're remembering unless you're just speaking of the feeling you had that you remember.
Starcatcher001 SILVER said...
on Sep. 25 2014 at 11:17 pm
The thumb was a really neat metaphor. My only critique is that at the beginning it was a bit choppy and confusing. Maybe if you add some punctuation or form it could help, but I also completely understand the creative genius behind a lack of structure so I might be the one seeing this piece wrong! Please keep writing because your word choice is superb!
Olivia-Atlet ELITE said...
on Sep. 25 2014 at 8:58 pm
I really loved this! The way you split the stanzas up was perfect, and the poem was amazing! I love the way you compared yourself wih a star, and how you discover your "Brilliance, it's really outstanding! Never stop being you, and never stop writing! CX
When I first realized that being different is okay.