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pre-breakfast dialogue MAG

September 11, 2015
By Random100 DIAMOND, Iloilo, Other
Random100 DIAMOND, Iloilo, Other
61 articles 1 photo 5 comments

egg:

i
saw
the light
when you cracked me.

he:

i
saw
the sun
in a broken cloud.



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on Sep. 28 2015 at 10:51 pm
sharpened_pencil GOLD, Warren, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Life can suck, sure. Mostly though it's a blank canvas. If you want to see something brighter in it, you might have to add it yourself." -Patrick Stump, Fall Out Boy

Not a problem! I loved your piece :)

on Sep. 18 2015 at 4:57 am
TheDolphin ELITE, Iloilo, Other
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thank you so much. that means a lot

on Sep. 15 2015 at 7:32 pm
sharpened_pencil GOLD, Warren, New Jersey
11 articles 1 photo 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life can suck, sure. Mostly though it's a blank canvas. If you want to see something brighter in it, you might have to add it yourself." -Patrick Stump, Fall Out Boy

Interesting little piece, woven with complex metaphors. I love how you were able to say so much with so little. Great job and congrats!

on Sep. 15 2015 at 3:48 pm
SomeoneMagical PLATINUM, Durham, New Hampshire
22 articles 1 photo 259 comments
Interesting but doesn't really make sense...the title is different and I like writers who stand out. Great job, and cheers for this;)

yanbryanm said...
on Sep. 14 2015 at 11:29 pm
yanbryanm, Iloilo, Other
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this is awesome. little words for a great meaning. i love it

on Sep. 14 2015 at 10:45 pm
Random100 DIAMOND, Iloilo, Other
61 articles 1 photo 5 comments
thank you april

on Sep. 14 2015 at 3:16 pm
AprilNicoleJones BRONZE, New Castle, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I write only because<br /> there is a voice within me<br /> that will not be still.&quot;<br /> ~ SYLVIA PLATH<br /> <br /> (MY FORMER ACCOUNTS: Icantwrite &amp; Punk.Snowflake)<br /> Published poems from my former accounts:<br /> - FRAIL HOPE (Icantwrite)<br /> - YOURSELF (Punk.Snowflake)

i love the brevity in this one.