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Short & sweet

September 19, 2009
By Brittaner DIAMOND, Edenton, North Carolina
Brittaner DIAMOND, Edenton, North Carolina
51 articles 0 photos 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
"words are just songs without the corny elevator music behind them"
-Me (random thought)


Life feels soo much like
My summers that have past
Short & sweet.

(ok teen ink said I had to enter an article at least a hundred characters long so i'm typing this to make it longer)


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on Nov. 28 2011 at 1:31 am
tweetiebruce PLATINUM, Sydney, Other
24 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is like music - You can make mistakes so you try again. But when the piece can't be helped you try again another time.

Thats is short and sweet.....and beautiful :) happy writing.... can you also please check out some of my work if you get some time:)

on Jan. 19 2011 at 8:05 pm
Brittaner DIAMOND, Edenton, North Carolina
51 articles 0 photos 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
"words are just songs without the corny elevator music behind them"
-Me (random thought)

I actually didn't notice that, quite an ironic coincidence.

omelette said...
on Jan. 19 2011 at 11:47 am
great poem. haikus are short and sweet too. was that intended, or coincidence??

on Jul. 5 2010 at 10:19 pm
Brittaner DIAMOND, Edenton, North Carolina
51 articles 0 photos 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
"words are just songs without the corny elevator music behind them"
-Me (random thought)

Thanks. I missed a word on the second line. It's supposed to be my summers that have passed on. I'm glad people like my work, gives me a reason to write more.

on Jul. 5 2010 at 8:36 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
1 article 0 photos 1979 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

fantastic!!:)) i really liked it. its so very true and beautiful too

on May. 22 2010 at 8:02 pm
Brittaner DIAMOND, Edenton, North Carolina
51 articles 0 photos 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
"words are just songs without the corny elevator music behind them"
-Me (random thought)

Yeah I kinda realize that now, I ment to write it as a Haiku, but it didn't turn ou that way. Thank you anyway.

cookfin said...
on May. 22 2010 at 1:38 pm
cookfin, Ames, Iowa
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Um, I liked it, but it's not a haiku.  Haikus have a 5-syllable first line, a 7-syllable second line, and a 5-syllable third line.

on Mar. 17 2010 at 7:56 pm
Brittaner DIAMOND, Edenton, North Carolina
51 articles 0 photos 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
"words are just songs without the corny elevator music behind them"
-Me (random thought)

thanks. I just thought of that and wrote it your idea is cool as well. Ill try to look as yours soon as well

on Mar. 17 2010 at 7:55 pm
Brittaner DIAMOND, Edenton, North Carolina
51 articles 0 photos 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
"words are just songs without the corny elevator music behind them"
-Me (random thought)

Thanks. I'll try to look at yours soon

on Mar. 17 2010 at 10:56 am
BleedingRose PLATINUM, Frederic, Wisconsin
33 articles 1 photo 378 comments

Favorite Quote:
*The darkness holds infinite possibilities.

(mine)

This certainly lives up to the title! I loved it, and as for writing 100 characters? I had that dilemma also, so I just did this:

,',',',',',',',',', or something cool. Mind commenting on some of my work? thx!

-Rose

on Dec. 18 2009 at 3:32 pm
Vylet.Mxoxoxo, Watford, Other
0 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is patient, Love is kind"

I like this, it's good. And for the people above it's short, becaus The title is "short and sweet" so the poem is short and sweet. Please comment or rate my work whenever you're less busy thank you and this your poem is good.

on Nov. 1 2009 at 11:13 am
Brittaner DIAMOND, Edenton, North Carolina
51 articles 0 photos 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
"words are just songs without the corny elevator music behind them"
-Me (random thought)

sure thing I'll do so soon. Thanks for the comment on my book 1st person to comment it.

Tybalt SILVER said...
on Oct. 27 2009 at 9:00 am
Tybalt SILVER, Coral Springs, Florida
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I like it. I don't think it needs to be longer. I put three verses in my haiku but I don't think your realy supposed to. It doesn't matter realy. Please look at mine!

on Sep. 29 2009 at 3:04 pm
Brittaner DIAMOND, Edenton, North Carolina
51 articles 0 photos 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
"words are just songs without the corny elevator music behind them"
-Me (random thought)

Yeah it kinda sucks. lol i'm trying out haikus for the first time so I'm gonna be working on writing some that don't suck as much. Thanks for the feedback!

on Sep. 29 2009 at 3:02 pm
Brittaner DIAMOND, Edenton, North Carolina
51 articles 0 photos 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
"words are just songs without the corny elevator music behind them"
-Me (random thought)

It's kinda supposed to be short it's a haiku. But yeah It does need work. I just wanted to experiment with haikus a bit. Thanks for the feedback!

cbandca said...
on Sep. 29 2009 at 12:04 pm
It could have had more dicriptive words.

on Sep. 29 2009 at 9:28 am
we liked your poem. but we think it could have been longer and more descriptive.