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I Told Myself I Wouldn't Say This MAG

February 18, 2010
By thescientistyellow GOLD, Nauvoo, Alabama
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thescientistyellow GOLD, Nauvoo, Alabama
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When you stop breathing
Life does not end, because she
Took my breath away

© Adriana M., Winter Park, FL

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on Jun. 23 2015 at 1:07 am
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SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND said...
on May. 29 2013 at 5:36 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
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I&#039;ve learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel. <br /> - Maya Angelou <br /> When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn&rsquo;t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out<br /> The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay<br /> If love produced a blossom/I&rsquo;d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I&rsquo;d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven<br /> And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

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Beautiful. Beautiful. Beautiful.
ChrisJ PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 30 2012 at 12:29 pm
ChrisJ PLATINUM, Rochester, New York
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This is really creative, different, and original. I really liked it! Please make sure to read some of my pieces too!
KalHibug13 SILVER said...
on Oct. 30 2012 at 11:11 am
KalHibug13 SILVER, Auburn, New York
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Taking one's breath away isn't  always about death. Alot of people say it took their breath away when they saw their newborn child (theat doesn't mean they died).
Kaffeine said...
on Apr. 10 2012 at 5:54 pm
Kaffeine, X, Other
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It took my breath away to see that so much emotion can be expressed in just three lines! Please don't stop writing!
beautifulspirit PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 14 2011 at 2:45 pm
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Simply beautiful~
JamesODalaigh BRONZE said...
on Oct. 22 2011 at 4:25 pm
JamesODalaigh BRONZE, Bandon, Other
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Wow is right! I was literally silenced by this, it's epic, please don't ever stop writing!
jasont727 PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 30 2011 at 7:29 pm
jasont727 PLATINUM, Calabasas, California
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Wow. Really, just wow. Thank you for such an inspirational and beautiful three lines.
jessiflower said...
on Dec. 16 2010 at 7:21 pm
Wow! i think its amazing how much feeling and strong emotions you were able to pack into those 3 lines!
DiamondsIntheGrass GOLD said...
on Aug. 14 2010 at 8:10 pm
DiamondsIntheGrass GOLD, Martinsville, New Jersey
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then why is it "'you' stop breathing"

and not "i"?

Seelix PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 7 2010 at 5:38 pm
Seelix PLATINUM, Chandler, Arizona
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This wonderful! It captures so much emotion (which is hard in a haiku!). Keep writing!
MelanieLouise PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 7 2010 at 12:00 pm
MelanieLouise PLATINUM, Plymouth, Minnesota
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i love how much emotion and description you fit into such a small amount of space. great work. keep writing, Mel :) oh and check out some of my work if you get the chance, i would love your opinion (:
The_Squirrel GOLD said...
on Aug. 6 2010 at 4:13 pm
The_Squirrel GOLD, Port Alberni, Other
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I will because I can, I can because I want to, I want to becasue you said I couldn&#039;t.

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eans she's so amazing that even though he should've died, he kept living just for her
lyssa28 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 17 2010 at 9:13 pm
lyssa28 BRONZE, Las Vegas, Nevada
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thats so AMAZING!!!
Shelly-T GOLD said...
on Jun. 22 2010 at 7:09 pm
Shelly-T GOLD, Romeoville, Illinois
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That's a profoundly excellent piece
Patience97 PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 3 2010 at 2:51 pm
Patience97 PLATINUM, New Tripoli, Pennsylvania
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&quot;People believe that if we really want to eliminate something, focus on that. How much sense does it make for us to give the particular problem all of the energy, as opposed to focusing on trust, love, living in abundance, education, or peace? -Un.

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Ummm... ok.
NorthernWriter said...
on Jun. 3 2010 at 2:10 pm
NorthernWriter, Fargo, North Dakota
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okay...scientifically...when you stop breathing..you die because you can no longer supply your body with oxygen.

 

BUTTTTT....

 

this amazing girl took his breath away....(he's still living)

the amazing girl defies science

Patience97 PLATINUM said...
on May. 29 2010 at 8:08 pm
Patience97 PLATINUM, New Tripoli, Pennsylvania
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&quot;People believe that if we really want to eliminate something, focus on that. How much sense does it make for us to give the particular problem all of the energy, as opposed to focusing on trust, love, living in abundance, education, or peace? -Un.

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So, Life doesn't end but she took your breath away?

Did she give it back?

I'm sorry... I don't really understand it...

Cheesecake SILVER said...
on May. 28 2010 at 4:24 pm
Cheesecake SILVER, Cripple Creek, Colorado
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not bad, im just tired of hearing about love stories.