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January 8, 2011
By lilmartz PLATINUM, Perrysburg, Ohio
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lilmartz PLATINUM, Perrysburg, Ohio
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Live Life Like A Party That Never Ends

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Heavenly clouds sparkling
At the dawn of a brand new day
All is right in the world

Cheerful spring morning
Little animals playing
Frolic in the meadow

Lazy afternoon drags
Bathing in beams overhead
Sun shines high in the sky

Westward sun hangs in open air
Arrays of warm hues fill the spaces
Orange red yellow

Evening shadows
Sun sets for another day
Over the horizon

Wolf howling to the moon
Abandoned and alone
Crying out into the night

© Olivia E., Alto, MI

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I was inspired by the changing elements in the sky throughout the course of a day in nature.
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This article has 11 comments.

Mckay ELITE said...
on Jul. 30 2013 at 4:48 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

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Each perfectly potrays a different scene in nature. 
Eshshah PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 30 2011 at 7:42 am
Eshshah PLATINUM, Galloway, New Jersey
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&quot;The woods are lovely, dark and deep. But I have promises to keep, and miles to go before I sleep.&quot; -Robert Frost

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I absolutely love the image you chose, plus the title, though the haiku could stand well just for itself, I like how you illustrated a day passing- I especially enjoyed the first two stanzas (maybe I'm just a morning person) and the last contrasts so well with the first, the only thing I can say is that some of the sections aren't the right format for haikus (5,7,5) and also, I agree with TanGem, some of the phrases are a little cliche.
Boosflash DIAMOND said...
on Jul. 20 2011 at 9:28 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Papillion, Nebraska
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I do love the drastic change captain. all is well my dear, very nice and well written.
xx..PieIsAwkward..xx BRONZE said...
on Apr. 24 2011 at 10:01 pm
xx..PieIsAwkward..xx BRONZE, Godfrey, Illinois
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I liked how you started at dawn and went into night, taking it one stage at a time. True, each Haiku seems very seperated from the rest, but if they weren't together like this, they probably wouldn't make much sense, and wouldn't seem as beautiful as they do when shoved together. Definitely like, especially the last one about the wolf :D
TanGem PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 2 2011 at 4:25 pm
TanGem PLATINUM, Colorado Springs, Colorado
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Love is not a feeling; it is a gift, an act, an ultimate sacrifice. -Me (Em)

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This is good, although I don't understand how each stanza flows to the next. Nature is not fragmented, so I don't really like how you've created a fragmentary piece.

Some phrases seem a bit cliche, such as "shines high in the sky." Can you find a more creative way to express those?

Overall, good inspiration.

the_sparrow SILVER said...
on Mar. 31 2011 at 10:12 pm
the_sparrow SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
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&quot;Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don&#039;t matter, and those who matter don&#039;t mind.&quot; -Dr. Seuss

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Great use of imagery! Yes, I also like how the last haiku is disconnected. "shift in tone" I would call it. It seems like you're confessing something almost, like we expect you to say happy things, when the last image is really on your mind. I feel like you are truthful in your writing, if that makes any sense
DaughterofEvil said...
on Feb. 21 2011 at 6:45 pm

I basically agree with what Tatiel said... they beat me to it. It was as if you were a bit disconnected from everything. It was almost as if you were God-like, omniscently looking down upon the world.

3.9/5

Tatiel PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 15 2011 at 7:36 pm
Tatiel PLATINUM, Washington, Vermont
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I like this poem! Love the transition from morning to night. I agree that the transitions between the stanzas are not super smooth, but I like it that way. I like the slightly...disconnected feel with the smoothly flowing topic. Very pretty! Good job capturing the images. 
HeatherBee BRONZE said...
on Feb. 9 2011 at 5:17 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
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Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper<br /> <br /> Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

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Ooh, i liked how like morning turned into night... That was really beautiful :) i liked it!!! it felt pretty
AmandaPanda123 SILVER said...
on Feb. 3 2011 at 4:54 pm
AmandaPanda123 SILVER, Brookville, Pennsylvania
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This is very beautiful and inspiring :)
singergurl12 GOLD said...
on Feb. 3 2011 at 6:35 am
singergurl12 GOLD, Jacksonville, Florida
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i really can't describe how to judge this. as a whole, it seems fragamentary and doesn't really flow. as single parts, though, each haiku is beautiful and flawless. great poetry- keep writing!