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Lovely Kisses

April 25, 2011
By Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 460 comments

Our lovely kisses,
are like tiny static shocks,
that connect us now.


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on Aug. 1 2011 at 12:50 am
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
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Favorite Quote:
‎"I’m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don’t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world." - Beyoncé

Very sweet :)))

on Aug. 1 2011 at 12:08 am
TheHangingGirl BRONZE, Winter Haven, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"Poets utter great and wise things that they themselves can not comprehend."

Wow.  My first kiss sounds like this...

on Jun. 12 2011 at 1:16 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 460 comments
Merci beaucoup!

on Jun. 11 2011 at 9:54 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 375 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

Great poem. Absolutely fantastic! The imagery is really amazing!

on Jun. 11 2011 at 12:20 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 460 comments
Thank you! I like the title as is though. :)

APL123 BRONZE said...
on Jun. 7 2011 at 7:03 pm
APL123 BRONZE, ..., New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened" - Dr. Seuss

i like the image of tiny static shocks...

but i was wondering if maybe you could have the tilte be "static" because the image of kisses is something that is used often


SamiLou SILVER said...
on Jun. 6 2011 at 7:16 pm
SamiLou SILVER, Lee&#39s Summit, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"Imagining the future is a kind of nostalgia"
-John Green (Looking For Alaska)

I was thinking make it into "that now connect us"

on Jun. 6 2011 at 6:30 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 460 comments
Thanks! Yeah, the 'now' annoys me, but I needed that fifth syllable.

on Jun. 6 2011 at 6:29 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 460 comments
Um, thanks. It is supposed to be sweet.

SamiLou SILVER said...
on Jun. 6 2011 at 2:35 pm
SamiLou SILVER, Lee&#39s Summit, Missouri
6 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imagining the future is a kind of nostalgia"
-John Green (Looking For Alaska)

i love the imagery of "tiny static shocks". beautiful! it reminds me of seeing fireworks when you kiss someone :) but you might want to reconsider the placement of the word "now". if it was me i would put it after "that"

on Jun. 6 2011 at 9:51 am
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

You're welcome!!!!! ;))

on Jun. 6 2011 at 2:43 am
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
41 articles 0 photos 650 comments

Favorite Quote:
‎"I’m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don’t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world." - Beyoncé

hmm.. sweet? yes, definitely sweet..

on Jun. 5 2011 at 1:23 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 460 comments
Thanks! :)

on Jun. 5 2011 at 11:32 am
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

Yeah that is really good!!!!!:))

on Jun. 4 2011 at 10:31 am
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 460 comments
Thank you both! :)

on Jun. 3 2011 at 9:23 pm
HaleyDRog. GOLD, Easley, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
In three words I can sum up everything I've learned about life. It goes on. -Robert Frost

I really love this piece. It has a great and unique message!

on Jun. 3 2011 at 8:36 pm
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
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Favorite Quote:
"I can do anything!"

Interesting! I see that you like haiku.