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September 25, 2011
By jasont727 PLATINUM, Calabasas, California
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jasont727 PLATINUM, Calabasas, California
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If there was no change, there would be no butterflies.

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I wonder how we
Would have changed if we had not
Sat Indian-style

On the bathroom tile?
Would it have been love we caught
In the ruby sea?

© Piper C., Roswell, GA

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WinterRose76 SILVER said...
on Apr. 6 2014 at 8:34 am
WinterRose76 SILVER, Ok., Florida
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Arise and be all that you dream - Flyleaf

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The cleverness and originality of your poem is brilliant. I've never read a haiku that followed an ABC CBA  rhyme pattern. Great work!
CourtCourt DIAMOND said...
on Feb. 16 2012 at 9:00 am
CourtCourt DIAMOND, Franklinville, New York
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2 Corinthians 12:9
But he said to me, “My grace is sufficient for you, for my power is made perfect in weakness. ” Therefore I will boast all the more gladly about my weaknesses, so that Christ’s power may rest on me.

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i absolutly love this one!!!
jasont727 PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 14 2011 at 8:58 pm
jasont727 PLATINUM, Calabasas, California
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I realize it's very hard to notice upon first glance. I'm glad that you liked it though!

And wow, that's really an honor. Thank you so much! :)

ChantelleK. said...
on Nov. 13 2011 at 5:17 pm
ChantelleK., Toronto, Other
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Oh, I love the ABC CBA rhyme scheme, though I didn't notice it until I saw your comment. :p

I love this so much. I favorited it.

A_____ said...
on Oct. 9 2011 at 7:04 am
A_____, Columbus, Ohio
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Wow!  I get it now!  That's amazing!
jasont727 PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 8 2011 at 6:02 pm
jasont727 PLATINUM, Calabasas, California
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If there was no change, there would be no butterflies.

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Thanks! I'm not sure if you noticed but all the lines do have rhymes---ABC CBA form. It's hard to notice when you're reading it, I know. But thank you!
A_____ said...
on Oct. 7 2011 at 4:06 pm
A_____, Columbus, Ohio
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Style, tile...nice rhyme...and ruby sea!  You're very talented.