Spider | Teen Ink


December 29, 2011
By Eshshah PLATINUM, Galloway, New Jersey
Eshshah PLATINUM, Galloway, New Jersey
32 articles 31 photos 239 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The woods are lovely, dark and deep. But I have promises to keep, and miles to go before I sleep." -Robert Frost

Slender spindly legs
tiptoe across wispy webs
shimmering threads wave

wind blows through the net
an iridescent ambush
unsuspected death

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on Mar. 16 2014 at 11:18 pm
KarmaBites GOLD, Columbia Heights, Minnesota
11 articles 0 photos 134 comments
Why didn't this get published?! It is definitely one of the best haiku couplets I have ever read! You have immense talent! 5/5 stars!

on May. 30 2013 at 10:09 am
Doctorbug BRONZE, Washington Island, Wisconsin
1 article 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You keep him in perfect peace whose mind is stayed on You, because he trusts in You."` Isaiah 26:3

Amazing! It was like one of those little snapshots of action. I could actually see the spider sitting there on a dew spotted web, and then when a little insect flew into it, the spider shot out toward it and then the image blanked out.   It was sooo cool, almost as if I were seeing a short movie! Well done, Esha!!

on Feb. 19 2012 at 12:35 am
AngelsLullaby GOLD, Neverland, Idaho
12 articles 7 photos 95 comments

Favorite Quote:
Music is a higher revelation from wisdom and philosophy. ~Ludwig Von Beethoven

Now this has great detail. I actually visualized the spider. *shutter* I hate spiders lol. Great haiku!

on Feb. 17 2012 at 3:11 pm
readaholic PLATINUM, Tomahawk, Wisconsin
27 articles 0 photos 425 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd rather fail because I fell on my own face than fall because someone tripped me up
~Jhonen Vasquez

YES awsome haiku!!!!

on Jan. 31 2012 at 9:10 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
35 articles 0 photos 1398 comments

Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
--Eleanor Roosevelt

Yeah I totally agree with your comment. The haiku is centralized on a subject of nature and the effects nature has on that subject. I like the line: "an iridescent ambush."

on Jan. 21 2012 at 2:54 pm
dolphinportkey7 GOLD, D, Other
12 articles 0 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Because I knew you, I have been changed for good" AND "'Tis better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all"

This is how haikus should be written. I could practically see the poor little spider's web getting destroyed; they're image-packed and emotional, and simple. Awesome!

on Jan. 15 2012 at 3:22 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
23 articles 3 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:

Yeah! You posted it!

on Jan. 10 2012 at 8:52 pm
RayBaytheDinosaur GOLD, Hampton, South Carolina
18 articles 17 photos 159 comments

Favorite Quote:
Beauty is in the eye of the beholder

Eek gave me chills >.< I hate spiders lol you had great detail though, good job!