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Sensing Death

January 9, 2012
By babyrex4 SILVER, Buffalo, New York
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babyrex4 SILVER, Buffalo, New York
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\"You may only be someone in the world, but to someone else, you may be the world.\"

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Buzzards fly sky high,
Swarming something down below,
There has been a death.

© Courtney R., Great Falls, VA

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readaholic PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 31 2012 at 6:58 pm
readaholic PLATINUM, Tomahawk, Wisconsin
27 articles 0 photos 425 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd rather fail because I fell on my own face than fall because someone tripped me up
~Jhonen Vasquez

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Good, especially for a haiku. They seem so limited, but the good ones are amazingly deep :)
babyrex4 SILVER said...
on Jan. 31 2012 at 2:57 pm
babyrex4 SILVER, Buffalo, New York
5 articles 6 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"You may only be someone in the world, but to someone else, you may be the world.\"

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Thank you so much! I don't really like haikus either, but after I wrote this one, I like it!
Kev-Girl said...
on Jan. 30 2012 at 11:12 pm
Wow, I am surprised by how much I like this! I'm really not a haiku type of writer/reader, but I quite honestly like this. Five stars! :)
babyrex4 SILVER said...
on Jan. 28 2012 at 2:18 pm
babyrex4 SILVER, Buffalo, New York
5 articles 6 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"You may only be someone in the world, but to someone else, you may be the world.\"

Author Unknown

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Thank you! :)
Mantequilla SILVER said...
on Jan. 28 2012 at 10:00 am
Mantequilla SILVER, Eagan, Minnesota
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I agree with EPU. I usually find these so simple and well, just boring, but this one is really nice...and slightly scary. Good work!
babyrex4 SILVER said...
on Jan. 27 2012 at 10:56 am
babyrex4 SILVER, Buffalo, New York
5 articles 6 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"You may only be someone in the world, but to someone else, you may be the world.\"

Author Unknown

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Thanks. :)
babyrex4 SILVER said...
on Jan. 27 2012 at 10:55 am
babyrex4 SILVER, Buffalo, New York
5 articles 6 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"You may only be someone in the world, but to someone else, you may be the world.\"

Author Unknown

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Thanks! Your comment is well appreciated!
Aginger GOLD said...
on Jan. 26 2012 at 9:12 pm
Aginger GOLD, Bingen, Washington
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"Why are you so busy trying to fit in when you were born to stand out?"

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Wow, this is intense. I love those short poems that catch you by surprise and really get you thinking. Though very short, there is something very enchanting about your poem. Nice job!
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND said...
on Jan. 26 2012 at 9:43 am
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND, Woodbine, Maryland
59 articles 24 photos 280 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I shut my eyes and all the world drops dead;
I lift my lids and all is born again.
(I think I made you up inside my head)."
-Sylvia Plath

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Nice job! There is very little middle ground with haukus, because their length makes them either gorgeous and full of meaning or choppy and gross. Yours is definently on the better side of the spectrum. Congrats!
babyrex4 SILVER said...
on Jan. 26 2012 at 7:02 am
babyrex4 SILVER, Buffalo, New York
5 articles 6 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"You may only be someone in the world, but to someone else, you may be the world.\"

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Thank you! These are my favorite kind of poems to write, but it requires a lot of thinking. And yep I checked out that poem too :). It was also really good!
Helena_Noel BRONZE said...
on Jan. 25 2012 at 4:59 pm
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

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Great job, love it! One of the things I admire about haikus is their leanth. It takes a special kind of person to fill such a small space with something ripe with meaning! Great job! Could you take a look at a poem of mine called "Princely Men"? Thanks!
babyrex4 SILVER said...
on Jan. 25 2012 at 2:39 pm
babyrex4 SILVER, Buffalo, New York
5 articles 6 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"You may only be someone in the world, but to someone else, you may be the world.\"

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Thank you :)
EthanCalhoun PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 25 2012 at 2:37 pm
EthanCalhoun PLATINUM, Fairview, New Jersey
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this is a really good short poem
babyrex4 SILVER said...
on Jan. 20 2012 at 2:53 pm
babyrex4 SILVER, Buffalo, New York
5 articles 6 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"You may only be someone in the world, but to someone else, you may be the world.\"

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Thank you! You can read some of my other work if you like this :D, I'd totally be glad to read yours too!
.king. SILVER said...
on Jan. 20 2012 at 7:16 am
.king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
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( ͡~ ͜ʖ ͡°)

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5 sylls,7 sylls, 5 sylls...Excellent you followed the rules, and I like the story behind this talented haiku, I'd like to read more !!!
babyrex4 SILVER said...
on Jan. 19 2012 at 4:15 pm
babyrex4 SILVER, Buffalo, New York
5 articles 6 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"You may only be someone in the world, but to someone else, you may be the world.\"

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Why thank you! :D haha
SeizeTheDay SILVER said...
on Jan. 19 2012 at 4:11 pm
SeizeTheDay SILVER, Cleveland Heights, Ohio
7 articles 0 photos 60 comments

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Carpe Diem (Seize the day).

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Whoa... That was really eerie. Awesome job! Keep up the good work! :D
babyrex4 SILVER said...
on Jan. 10 2012 at 5:20 pm
babyrex4 SILVER, Buffalo, New York
5 articles 6 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"You may only be someone in the world, but to someone else, you may be the world.\"

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written* sorry for my horrible grammar.
babyrex4 SILVER said...
on Jan. 10 2012 at 5:20 pm
babyrex4 SILVER, Buffalo, New York
5 articles 6 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"You may only be someone in the world, but to someone else, you may be the world.\"

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Thanks sis! I wouldn't have wrote this poem without your support. :) But I still believe you have more of a talent.. This poem is only 3 lines.. imagine what you can turn it into.
marissadele PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 10 2012 at 4:06 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
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"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

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FIRST COMMENT!! :D your haiku is pretty good sis, you stayed with the 5-7-5 syllable rule accurately, i really like the idea...you. most. certainly. can. write. a. poem.! You just might get better than me XD 5/5